#2 (permalink) Mon Nov 22, 2010 12:40 pm Re: building a center of business research or center of farming research in your |
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Some people want to build a business research center in my country. Others need a center of farming research. In my opinion,because the world nowadays shifts toward the modernization and industrialization, I choose the first choice as my option.
Firstly, the system of business is more and more complicated. For this reason, the possibilities of failure in such a competitive world is so high that people can't predict exactly. For example, the world has seen the Great Depression in USA causing the decadence of USA's economic. Even though thousands of plans were produced to prevent it. It was inevitable because those plans were out of date and lacked thorough analysis. As a result, people nowadays must open a business research centre to predict the outcome of businesses result more completely to prevent its exist ence.
Secondly, the vogue among consumers varies dramatically so businessmen find it difficult to adapt. For example, yesterday people evince a strong desire of simple computer for mathematics. However, today people seem to desire a laptop associated with camera, Internet. Moreover, my city is quite remote so accessing to a real business is very difficult. For this reason, a business research must be built for searching to adjust the demand of people. Is it important, isn't it?
In conclusion, as I discussed above, my city strongly need a business research center ................................................................................................................................ Not bad Kaka, but a little too simplistic. You should never ask a question in your essay. It is your opinion you are stating, not asking the opinion of the reader.
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#3 (permalink) Mon Nov 22, 2010 13:14 pm building a center of business research or center of farming research in your coun |
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Hello mr kitos. Do you mean that my content is too much simple, in other word, quite bored? _________________ No pain, No gain ! |
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Kaka193 I'm here quite often ;-)
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