#2 (permalink) Tue Nov 23, 2010 19:41 pm Re: Over-dependence on computers |
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Topic: Children are spending more time at their computers today than playing with their friends. What are the negative consequences of this over-dependence on computers and how can they be avoided?
TASK: Along with the popularity of computers, children are spending more time playing games on-line, instead of playing with their friends. As a result, it has caused many negative consequences for our children which relate to health, intelligence development, distance to other family members, and so on. This essay will examine these harmful outcomes, as well as point out the measure to avoid this over-dependence.
The first and foremost, the more attracted children are to computers, the more bad influence they will get in their later life period. The most obvious problem is that computers limit the vision. Indeed, over-focusing on computer screens for a long time can makes their eyes become exhausted. For that reason, more and more children wear spectacles today. Beside that, it also creates the heavy pressure on the heart and nervous system.
Moreover, it can discourage the development of intelligence in both learning and improving people skills. Firstly, many argued that the more active the children are, the more intelligent they will be when they grow up, because their brains will have more chances to practice in solving real problems. Furthermore, when playing with friends, children will learn from their friends and learn how to improve their behaviors. In contrast, children who waste a great amount of time on computers tend to become violent, not including they do not have enough time for studying.
Eventually, children do not share their time with their family. They don’t want to spend time in order to understand and take care other family members. //When it happen, whether they can really love and trust the other family members . As the result, they will be far from their own family gradually.// (This makes little sense.)
To put all in a nutshell, over-dependence on computers can endanger children ‘s health, intelligence and can isolate them from their family. Therefore, parents should train time management skill to their children from the moment they are little. It is really helpful to reduce the side-effects of computers. ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::. Many silly errors in this essay JM, which you would have seen had you taken time to review it. I don't want a quickly composed essay ... I want only your best work!
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