Young people should take several different kinds of job

[Judywu76]

Hello sir, I hope that you could spare some time to correct my essay. I am very appreciate for your help.

Topic: Do you think that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take a career in a long term?

Views differ greatly when it comes to the statement that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take a career in a long term. Some people believe that young people can try many different jobs before they find their perfect jobs. On the other side of divide, people believe that young people should think clearly before they take a job and not to change their jobs too often. Personally, I disagree with the statement in the very beginning. Following are some reasons to support my viewpoint.

In the first place, people who take several different kinds of job may represent that they haven’t figure out what kind of job they prefer yet. I think that we should find out our own interest before we start to work. It is too time-consuming to try different jobs until we find a perfect job. Besides, take too many jobs may have a negative effect on our resume.

In the second place, some young people switch their job from one to another just because they are easily to get tired of the same job. They tend to be appealed by the new jobs they never done before. In that case, the problem is not from the job but from the person himself. By holding this kind of attitude, young people cannot find the job for their long term career.

Finally, there is some people lack patience so they change their job once they face difficulties on their job. Then they make an excuse that the job is not an ideal job. When people start to try solving problems on their job, I believe their job will appears to be much more interesting than it did before.

In conclusion, people switch several different kinds of jobs may means not only people don’t understand themselves but they tend to get tired of routines. In addition, young people may take different jobs just because they encounter some troubles. As a result, I strongly believe that young people should not take several different kinds of job before they take a career in a long term.

Thank you so much!!

Judy

[Kitosdad]

[quote="Judywu76"]Hello sir, I hope that you could spare some time to correct my essay. I am very appreciate for your help.

Topic: Do you think that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take a career in a long term?

Views differ greatly when it comes to the statement that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take a career for the long term. Some people believe that young people can try many different jobs before they find their perfect job. On the other side of the divide, people believe that young people should think carefully before they take a job and not to change their jobs too often. Personally, I disagree with the statement from the very beginning/outset. Following are some reasons to support my viewpoint.

In the first place, people who take several different kinds of job may represent that they haven’t figured out what kind of job they prefer yet. I think that we should find out our own interest before we start to work. It is too time-consuming to try different jobs until we find a perfect job. Besides, taking too many jobs may have a negative effect on our resume.

In the second place, some young people switch their jobs from one to another just because they easily get tired of the same job. They tend to be attracted by the new jobs they have never done before. In that case, the problem is not from the job but from the person himself. By holding this kind of attitude, young people cannot find the job for their long term career.

Finally, there are some people who lack patience so they change their job once they face difficulties on their job. Then they make an excuse that the job is not an ideal job. When people start to try solving problems on their job, I believe their job will appears to be much more interesting than it did before.

In conclusion, people switching between several different kinds of jobs may mean not only people don’t understand themselves, but they tend to get tired of routines. In addition, young people may take different jobs just because they encounter some troubles. As a result, I strongly believe that young people should not take several different kinds of job before they take a career for the long term.
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Nice work Judy. Well written.

Kitos. 8.5/10
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[Judywu76]

Thank you, Kitos!!!!
I will try hard to write a better essay.