International student should permit to work outside campus

[Seasand80]

According to the law, international students can be allowed to work at campus within twenty hours per week. If they work outside campus it is illegal. Many international students this law should be changed as they can work outside campus but government can permit their maximum time. In my point of view, I believe that international students should allow working off campus because of earning experience, supporting their finance, and having equal right as native students.
The first reason why international students should be approved to work off-campus is the way they can earn real experience. If international students only study in school, they will never have a chance to practice what they have learned in the school. On the other hand, they will not know what happen in society. It is not always right to state that knowledge from universities or colleges can be applied in the real work environment.
The second reason international students should have right to work outside campus is to support their finance. Tuition fee for international students four times higher compared to native students. Normally, international students come from developing countries and they want to have knowledge from developed countries. Their income which they earn in their counties is not enough to cover all cost.
Finally, international students should legalize to work outside campus. According to regulation, international students can work on campus within twenty hours per week. However, jobs in campus are limited so it is fact that all international students have chance to work on campus. On the other hand, there is no gap or knowledge between international students and native students; however, native students can work any time outside campus but international students can’t. It seems unfair.
All in all, it is better to change the law that international students should be legal to work outside campus. There is no point to give permission for international students to work on- campus but jobs in campus is not always available for them. If international students can be worked out campus, this is also the best way to help them to use knowledge they study in school , assistant a part their finance, and giving them a chance as other students have.
Hi Kitos,

Could you correct my essay? for body paragraph 3, I need to use counter-point but I don't know how to mention it? could you advise me how to use it effective?

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[Kitosdad]

According to the law, international students can be allowed to work at campus for twenty hours per week. If they work outside campus it is illegal. Many international students think that this law should be changed so that they can work outside campus, and that the government should permit them to do so. From my point of view, I believe that international students should be allowed to work off campus because of learning experiences, supporting their finance, and having equal rights as native students.

The first reason why international students should be approved to work off-campus is tin this way they can learn real experience. If international students only study in school, they will never have a chance to practice what they have learned in the school. On the other hand, they will not know what is happening in society. It is not always right to state that knowledge from universities or colleges can be applied in the real work environment.

The second reason international students should have right to work outside campus is to support their finances. Tuition fees for international students ar four times higher compared to those of native students. Normally, international students come from developing countries and they want to have knowledge from developed countries. Their income, which they earn in their counties, is not enough to cover all costs.

Finally, international students should be allowd to work outside campus. According to the regulations, international students can work on campus for twenty hours per week. However, jobs in campus are limited, so it is a fact that all international students have little chance to work on campus. On the other hand, there is no gap or knowledge between international students and native students; however, native students can work any time outside campus, but international students can’t. It seems unfair.

All in all, it is better to change the law so that international students should be permitted to work outside campus. There is no point to give permission for international students to work on- campus but jobs in campus are not always available to them. If international students can work off-campus, this is also the best way to help them to use knowledge they study in school, assistant in their finance, and gives them the same chance that other students have.
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Not bad Seasand, but rather repetitive.

Kitos. 8/10
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