school knowledge and experimental knowledge

[Tri2827]

Dear Kitos,

I am still waiting for my score, I think one or two days latter, I will receive it.
Now, I still continue practicing. Can you correct this my essay?

Topic: It has been said, "Not all learning takes place in the classroom." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from personal experience with knowledge gained from classroom instruction. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

During their lives, people learn new knowledge from different sources. They can learn from their own experiences, from others’ mistakes, from books and from schools. Knowledge gained from real life and knowledge gained from school are both very important to each person. However, in my opinion, knowledge that we learn from schools is more important than that from real experience. The following reasons will support my point of view.

First of all, knowledge from schools provides us deeper understanding about a subject than knowledge that we learn in normal life. In normal life, we learn only patchy information about subjects. For example, we can learn how to set up and use a program in computer from a friend, or how to use ginger and garlic to cure a fever. Although they are very important, they do not provide us a thorough understanding about a specific subject. On the contrary, in schools, we can learn how computer operate, how to design a computer program. In medical subjects we can learn the mechanism that substances affect human body. From this, we understand why some herbals can help us cure a specific disease, or maybe we can concoct new methods to cure diseases.

Secondly, we can learn advanced knowledge in schools, but not in our normal experiences. To become an expert in computer technology, for example, a person has to major in computer science in a university. While, this person studies in this university, he or she will have chance to learn the most advanced technology such as Bluetooth technology, wireless technology and so on. After finishing studying, this person will become an expert in his or her field. In contrast, we can only learn some simple tricks in normal days, for example how to cook a kind of food or what we should bring with us when traveling faraway.

In conclusion, although knowledge that we learn from our experiences is helpful for us, the one we learn from schools is far more important. This is because it provides us a deep understanding about a subject and it is really advanced.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor on the possibility of life on Mars

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