wealthy countries help poor ones

[Tri2827]

Dear Kitos,
I guess that I will know my score on tomorrow.

I still keep practicing now, this is my essay. Can you take a look and correct all mistakes for me.
I think it is quite long and I spend 50 minutes to write it, I think I have to learn to manage writing time.

Topic: Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the government of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

In poor countries, there are many global problems that cruelly affect not only those countries themselves but also other countries as well. For example, abject poverty can accelerate criminal rate and low-living quality can trigger plagues that may affect the whole world. In addition, it is also the cause of lacking well-trained workforce for the world. Thus, I believe that if wealthy countries help poor ones, the whole mankind will benefit from this. To illustrate my point of view, all those arguments will be elaborated and exemplified as follow.

To begin with, we can reduce criminal rate significantly if wealthy countries help the poor ones. In poor countries, many people are no able to earn a living by working normally. Their condition forces them to commit crimes. For example, in some poor villages in Liberia, many children have to thieve money from visitor to pay for their daily meals. Plus, many citizens in Somalia, one of the poorest countries in the world, become pirates. They claim that being pirates provide them better lives. They pillage commercial ships navigating nearby their region. This causes many troubles for merchants around the world.

Secondly, if living condition in poor countries is improved, we will prevent many deadly epidemics from happening. As we know that, low hygiene condition is ideal for a lot of diseases. In Zimbabwe, for example, many children have to suffer from diarrhea, malaria and typhoid. A lot of them die from the disease. In addition, many women die when giving birth because they do not have good clinics and hospital. However, if other countries help them, their living condition will be improved and so diseases do not have any chance to take place.

Finally, when rich countries help the poor ones, we will have a high quality workforce in the future. If the living condition is improved, people in poor countries will have a good condition to study. When a person gets enough nutrition, he or she will become healthier both physically and mentally. Thus, they can study better. Plus, they have chance to receive good education from developed countries. As a result, there will be more experts in many fields, and they can work for companies around the world. That benefits both poor countries and wealth countries.

In conclusion, poor living condition can cause a lot of global problems such as criminals, epidemic and low-quality labor. However, all these things can be solved if the wealth countries help the poor ones. Thus, I hope that countries around the world always help each other, so the whole mankind always receives exquisite lives.

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[Kitosdad]