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#1 (permalink) Fri Dec 24, 2010 7:09 am Parents should help their children prepare for future life through encouraging th |
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How do you like it? Advise please. Thank you.
From generation to generation, parents are worried about their children's future. It is parents' responsibility to help their children make a preparation. Some parents suggest their children to take a part-time job as a preparation. I think this is a good method; however there are other good ways to help prepare their future life.
To begin with, it is our parents who give birth to us. When we were young, they provided food and shelter to us. After about twenty years, we grow up, and have enough abilities to live on our own. But how can we learn these necessary abilities for our future life? Obviously our parents have the obligation to teach us. They will teach us how to make a living by finding our own livelihood, how to get on well with others. These are fundamental skills for us. If we are not taught these skills, we will suffer in the later life. Likewise, animals do the same things. Mother lions teach their children how to hunt their captive. And mother monkeys show their babies how to find an ant nest. This is so-called instinct. Parents should make sure their children can survive.
Second, encouraging their children to take a part-time job is a effective way for parents to help children build up necessary skills. Through taking part in a part-time job, children can benefit a lot. For one thing, they can learn the true value of money. No sweet without sweat. Only hard work can lead you to a success and earn money. For the other thing, since children have earned some money from these part-time jobs, they have their own property. They can buy some toys or comic stripes they dream of. Now it is time for them to learn how to use money properly and efficiently. They can learn what their real need is and what is not. Have a strong financial ability is really useful in the future
What's more, there are many other efficient ways to help prepare children's future. Parents obviously should encourage their children to work hard at school. Children can learn basic knowledge at school which is also necessary in the future. And parents can suggest their children read some biographies of successful businessmen such as Bill Gates and Steve Jobs, absorbing their successful experience.
In summary, parent surely help their children make a preparation for the future by encouraging them to study hard at school taking a part-time job and reading some famous biographies.
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2219156 I'm new here and I like it ;-)
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#2 (permalink) Fri Dec 24, 2010 9:51 am Re: Parents should help their children prepare for future life through encouragin |
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| 2219156 wrote: |
How do you like it? Advise please. Thank you.
From generation to generation, parents HAVE ALWAYS worried about their children's futureS. It is THE RESPONSIBILITY OF parents' to help their children make a preparation. Some parents suggest their children to take a part-time job as a preparation. I think this is a good method; however there are other good ways to help prepare THEM FOR their future life.
To begin with, it is our parents who give birth to us. When we ARE young, they provided food and shelter FOR us. After about twenty years, we grow up, and have enough abilities to live on our own. How can we learn these necessary abilities for our future liVES? Obviously our parents have the obligation to teach us. They will teach us how to make a living by finding our own livelihood AND how to get on well with others. These are fundamental skills for us. If we are not taught these skills, we will suffer in later life. Likewise, animals do the same things. Mother lions teach their children how to hunt their PREY, and mother monkeys show their babies how to find an ant nest. This is so-called instinct. Parents should make sure their children can survive.
Second, encouraging their children to take a part-time job is a effective way for parents to help children build up necessary skills. Through taking part in a part-time job, children can benefit a lot. For one thing, they can learn the true value of money. No sweet without sweat. Only hard work can lead you to success and ENABLE YOU TO earn money. For the other thing, since children have earned some money from these part-time jobs, they have their own property. They can buy some toys or comic strips they dream of. Now it is time for them to learn how to use money properly and efficiently. They can learn what their real need is and what is not. HavING a strong financial ability is really useful in the future
What's more, there are many other efficient ways to help prepare children's futureS. Parents should encourage their children to work hard at school. Children can learn basic knowledge at school which is also necessary FOR the future. Parents can suggest their children read some biographies of successful businessmen such as Bill Gates and Steve Jobs, absorbing their successful experienceS.
In summary, parents can surely help their children make a preparation for the future by encouraging them to study hard at school, taking a part-time job and reading some famous biographies. ............................................................................................................................. Don't start a sentence with "and". It denotes a continuation of what you are already writing, therefore a comma should be used as a natural break, and the following word with a small case letter. Pretty good work my friend. Keep it up.
Kitos. 8.5/10
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#3 (permalink) Sat Dec 25, 2010 3:54 am Parents should help their children prepare for future life through encouraging th |
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| got it. buddy. I will keep that in mind. |
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2219156 I'm new here and I like it ;-)
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#4 (permalink) Sat Dec 25, 2010 12:39 pm Re: Parents should help their children prepare for future life through encouragin |
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Hi you have done a good job but I just don't feel good about this sentence"....we will suffer in later life" as it implies incarnation to me and means somehow next life to me,I think it's better to say "we will suffer in life later on"or we will consequently suffer in life. |
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Maryamp I'm new here and I like it ;-)
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#5 (permalink) Sun Dec 26, 2010 3:44 am Re: Parents should help their children prepare for future life through encouragin |
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| haha,maybe you are right. next life, interesting.I will chANGE it |
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2219156 I'm new here and I like it ;-)
Joined: 20 Nov 2010 Posts: 40 Location: Beijing
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