Scientists believe junk food is damaging to our health. Some people think the sol

[Daniel_Guan]

Scientists believe junk food is damaging to our health. Some people think the solution to this issue is educating people about the harm of junk food. Others argue that it is not the right answer to the problem. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Fast food restaurants have sprung up in every corner of cities and these restaurants inevitably provide the customers junk food. Most people reach consensus that they are harmful and they have caused tremendous diseases like heart attack and diabetes. While individuals’ real division is in the measures that can eliminate the harms, some of them insist that educating conquers the negative effects easily. I doubt whether it could function well alone.
The ones supporting that it performs well have persuasive evidences.
Their first fact comes from the passed experiences. Although in the ancient days, lead was widely used in water pipes to carry water to residents, designers abandoned it after the science revealed its poison could aggrandize many mental illnesses. Furthermore, people had transformed lifestyles from primitive one to modern one after they were conditioned by the education systems. Many individuals neglect the harms duo to their unawareness of the dangers the junk food contain. Once they realized it, they would avoid this kind of food and adapt themselves to a healthy diet habit. Training may also endow people with the ability of distinguishing potential dangers from exaggerated ads from the producers of junk food.
However, I question whether mere reliance on education would curb the spread the intake of such food.
Initially, many people choose them not just because of the flavor and taste but the necessity of limited dinnertime. Companies hope their employers be more productive in working time by cutting off lunchtime to half an hour. As a result, many workers have no adequate time to finish their lunch and they reluctantly switch to fast food. Second, the living paces are accelerated by the longer distance between work and home. Many would travel more than 2 hours to commute a day. After work, they would be so tired to cook themselves and then eat out. Finally, fast food usually has advantage in terms of price and serving time. People prefer it for the low price and convenience.
To sum up, I believe many reasons attributing to the prospering of fast food. Residents feed on such food mainly because they have to rather than they like to. To rid harms of the restaurants, we should coordinate efforts of whole society, such as reduction of working time, prolonging of dinnertime, good construction design of working positions and residential ones.

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[Kitosdad]

Scientists believe junk food is damaging to our health. Some people think the solution to this issue is educating people about the harm of junk food. Others argue that it is not the right answer to the problem. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Answers:
Fast food restaurants have sprung up On every corner of EVERY CITY and these restaurants inevitably provide the customers WITH junk food. Most people HAVE reachED AN AGREEMENT that they are harmful, and THAT they have caused tremendous diseases like heart attackS and diabetes. While individuals’ real division is in the measures that can eliminate the harms, some of them insist that educating conquers the negative effects easily. I doubt whether it could function well alone.
The ones supporting that it performs well have persuasive evidence.
Their first fact comes from the PAST experiences. In ancient TIMES lead was widely used in MAKING water pipes to carry water to residents. Designers abandoned it after science revealed its poison could aggrandize many mental illnesses. Furthermore, people had transformed THEIR lifestyles from primitive to modern after they were conditioned by the educationAL systems. Many individuals IGNORED the harms DUE to their unawareness of the dangers junk foodS contain. Once they realized it, they would avoid this kind of food and adapt themselves to a healthy diet habit. Training may also endow people with the ability of distinguishing potential dangers from exaggerated ads from the producers of junk food.
However, I question whether mere reliance on education would curb the spread the intake of such food.
Initially, many people choose them not just because of the flavor and taste but the necessity of limited MEAL-timeS. Companies hopeD THAT their EMPLOYEES WOULD be more productive in working time by REDUCING THEIR lunchtimeS to half an hour. As a result, many workers HAD no adequate time to finish their lunch and they reluctantly switchED to fast food. Second, the living paces are accelerated by the longer distance between work and home. Many would travel more than 2 hours to WORK EACH day. After work, they would be TOO tired to cook themselves and SO THEY ATE out. Finally, fast food usually has advantageS in terms of price and serving time. People prefer it for the low price and convenience.

To sum up, I believe many reasons attributE to the prospering of fast food. Residents feed on such food mainly because they have to rather than they like to. To rid harms of the restaurants, we should coordinate THE efforts of OUR whole society, such as reduction of working time, prolonging of dinnertime, good construction design of working positions and residential ones.
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Daniel, your intentions are good but your work is disorganised. You need to concentrate on what you are writing. Try to divide this type of essay into two parts; The advantages and disadvantages of eating fast food. The harm it causes and your solutions to cure it.
You write pretty well, but you would do far better if you were to spend more time reading.

Kitos. 8/10

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[Daniel_Guan]

I got your meaning. Thank you, sir.
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