If you could change one important thing about your hometown

[Aperson]

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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change?

A tremendous amount of roads in my home country of Russia is in a bad state. Only in the western part, near Moscow and Saint Petersburg, the government actually cares about highways. But the further east in Russia you drive, the harder it gets. I met people in the US who complain about their road systems, but I am certain if they had a chance to drive through my city, they would cry because of the poor quality of the local highways. So if I could change one essential item about my hometown, I would improve the local roadways, a nightmare of potholes. I support my point of view with the following reasons.
First, improving the roads is my town would help to save a good amount of time because drivers would be able to go faster to any direction. My hometown does not have traffic jams; however, the road conditions do not allow them to accelerate in order to avoid potholes and bumps.
Second is a financial reason. Nowadays car owners in my hometown actually spend more finance to fix their vehicles after regular breakdowns than to buy new. Also, goods are delivered to the local stores rarely and it takes more time because of the bad road states. Random people who could be customers very seldom drive through my city. These facts make the number of local entrepreneurs even less.
Finally, the roads’ improvement would decrease danger for drivers in my hometown. Now one third of the local roadways are unpaved. The most common reasons for local auto accidents are the poor road conditions, and dangerous street design.
In conclusion, because of the reasons mentioned above I would advance the development roads in my hometown.

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[Kitosdad]

[Aperson]

I appreciate it Kitosdad.