Integrated Essay

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The reading passage and the professor both discuss the topic of online encyclopedias. However, the speaker discord with the idea in the reading passage. He believes that the three reasons presented in the reading are questionable, and she enumerates several supporting to oppose the article.

First of all, the lecturer argues that both online and traditional encyclopedias contain mistakes. People can’t expect that they can find an encyclopedias without any error. In the speaker’s opinion, it’s an easier task to revise the online encyclopedia than traditional one. This is exact contradiction of the issue mentioned in the reading part, which says that contributor may edit some error information on the online encyclopedias.

In the second place, the speaker goes further to make a point that the online encyclopedias has some strategies to avoid malicious attacks. She explains that the crucial facts in the website provide read-only format, therefore, people can’t revise the indisputable content. What’s more, there are some supervisors to check all the changes on the encyclopedias. This perspective gives different explanations from the reading passage and also casts doubts on the idea that the online encyclopedias can’t prevent the malign influence.

In the third place, the speaker is opposed to the writer’s standpoint by highlighting that space is not a critical issue for online encyclopedias. In order to establish a solid and concrete statement, the speaker says that limited space is a main concern of traditional encyclopedias, therefore, they have to choose what kind of information is really important. But, the online encyclopedias can include greatly knowledge and it also reflects what the users are interested in. Those illustrations definitely refute the idea that too much information included in the online encyclopedias.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a student and her coach

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