Universities should give the same amount of money to their students.

[Sweetcandle]

Hello Kitos ... happy new year
Could you please correct my essay?
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

It’s a fact that those who read a lot are those who can make a change in our world. Since ages, reading was very important. If we take a look in our history we will find that some ancient considered books as best friends especially in loneliness times. In our modern world almost every university are supported with huge library. We can find different kind of books in varies field such as science, Technology, chemistry and physics.

Actually, libraries are for all kind of people. It’s a perfect place for physicians, technologist, athletics and musicians. They can attend it anytime to search about books they are interested in.

In the other hand, sports are limited to a cretin’s individual. We refer to them as the athletics. While those who are interested in such activities may find it interesting and important for healthy life others may find it boring and exhausted. So it depends in people personalities. For those reasons I disagree with the statement.

‘ Knowledge is a power ‘ they said. Hence, in order to get higher amount of educations we need a big libraries with various books in different field. That’s will require a huge amount of money. For these propose, I think it’s a wise behavior to give a huge amount of money to libraries rather than anything.

After all, we can always judge a populations by knowing how well educated they are. So, lets always support and encourage the development of our libraries to be smarter and stronger.

P.S. i wrote many essays but i still find it hard to write .. would you please suggest advice for me to improve my writing skills? my exam after one month and i'm scared :(

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a dorm mother and a resident

[Kitosdad]

Hello Kitos ... happy new year
Could you please correct my essay?
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

It’s a fact that those who read a lot are those who can make a change in our world. Since ages, Reading was IS very important. If we take a look inTO our history we will find that some ancientS considered books as THEIR best friends, especially in lonelY times. In our modern world almost every university are supported with HAS A huge library. We can find different kindS of books in variOUS fieldS such as science, technology, chemistry and physics.

Actually, libraries are for all kindS of people. It’s THEY ARE perfect placeS for physicians, technologistS, athletES and musicians. They can attend it VISIT THEM any time to search about books they are interested in.
(When you begin a sentence with a plurality, then it must be continued in the same way.)

In ON the other hand, sports are limited to cretinOUs individualS. We refer to them as athletics. While those who are interested in such activities may find THEM interesting and important for healthy life, others may find THEM boring and exhaustING, so it depends ON people personalities. For those reasons I disagree with the statement.

THEY SAY,‘ Knowledge is a power. ‘ Hence, in order to get A higher amount LEVEL of education we need a big libraries FILLED with various books in different fieldS. That’s THAT will require a huge amount of money. For these propose, I think it’s a wise behavior to give a huge amount of money to libraries rather than anything.

After all, ALL IN ALL, we can always judge a populations NATION by knowing NOTING how well educated ITS PEOPLE are, so lets always support and encourage the development of our libraries to beCOME smarter and stronger.
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Good morning SC. You have every opportunity to improve your writing skills very quickly
here on the Forum. However, it will take work from you to avail yourself of this facility.
Spend your time reading the work of other students here. Read the edited versions of the work. Read some of the many stories written on the next thread. As you do so, read aloud. This will serve the secondary function of improving your speaking. Your reading will become even better, and listening to yourself will improve your understanding of English. All four segments of the TOEFL exam are here for your taking. Read, speak, listen, and finally, write.

Kitos. 7/10
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Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Sweetcandle]

Thanks for your advice I will try my best i promise.
i have questions to ask:
- what is the different between in and into ?
- i didn't understand what the meaning of this sentence (In our modern world almost every university A huge library) after you corrected it.

Thanks in advance :)

[Kitosdad]

Sorry, I missed out has. This has been corrected.
We don't usually look "in" anything, we look "into".
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