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please check my essay #1 (permalink) Sun Jan 02, 2011 11:43 am   please check my essay
 

Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyones life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

The definition of advertisment is that, the product which publishes its picture and features in newspapers and magazine, or sometimes, it is a short vidio which we can see it on the screns or in the websites like the Youtube and Twiter and many others places to excite people buy it even if it is useless or useful, important they gain just.


When we talk about positive part of advertising, first thing which comes in our mind is, person who act in this advertising. Undoubtedly, he or she must has an effect on the people and he or she must be famous person whether he or she actross or actress or singer or sporting or presenter or model, there are many others fields which have famous people. However, famous person who presents advertisment earns alot of money, therefore, he or she benefit from it and also he or she gain many gifts from advertisers, nevertheless, the people spend money to buy it, perhaps, they benefit from it or not. For instance, Givenchy advertisment with Jolia Robert, they paid ten millions dollar for her to advertise for their new make up products, but unexpected thing is that, when they did the advertising with her, in first ten days they gain more than one hundred millions dollar, in my perspective, this is biggest deal in the history of the advertisings. Actually, there are many companies which gain from the advertiment, for example, Pepsi and Coca Cola corporations, they are international because every day they creat new advertisment, whether with famous person or any other perfect person.

The negative part of advertisment are many, I will mention them below.
First and foremost, When we see our favourite famous person in any advertisment, we immediately buy this product whether we benefit from it or not, and this is big mistake when we do not need the product, because, it is waste of money.
Secondly, there are companies which did not sell their products, thus, they go to advertising trick to sell their bad products, because people do not know that these products are bad, then, they buy it and harmful from it, because the company just want to gain money and do not care if the people damage from it or not.

to sum up, In my perspective, I believe that, when I see certain advertising on the screen I must go to market and try the product before I buy it, even I make sure it is fit me, I think that, it is effective way to protect your self from useless products.

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please check my essay #2 (permalink) Sun Jan 02, 2011 12:05 pm   please check my essay
 

I am really hoping to see an improvement in the work of you all this New Year. You still have a limit of two essays a day, but if you feel you need to write only one per day to show an improvement, so much the better. The vast majority have it within them to write really good essays about their topics. Take your time. Think what you want to say. Think about how you intend to say it, then review it in your mind once more before beginning to write.
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If you get nine, which is going to be really difficult, make sure you write even better in your next essay. Your goal is TEN, always strive for it. It is achievable, and all of you have the ability to achieve it.
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please check my essay #3 (permalink) Sun Jan 02, 2011 12:15 pm   please check my essay
 

Ok, but I want to know why did not check my essay? because it is bad or what? please tell me
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please check my essay #4 (permalink) Sun Jan 02, 2011 12:29 pm   please check my essay
 

Did you really read Kitos's post, Mona?
You must change your topic title (Advertisement for example, instead of asking for help). Just do it or your essay will be ignored

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