I am a newcomer.Please check my essay.Thank you

[Higa]

Topic:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies an TV programs should always show the audience that good people are being rewarded and bad people are punished.

________________________________________________________________________

More and more movies and TV show a variety of programs nowadays, and most of them give an considerable influence on the audiences. Some people think that those programs should not show good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished all the time without dramatic. Others consider that programs need to insist the discipline that the good are being rewarded and the bad are being punished. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the later idea because lots of people would inspire by the actor or actress in the play.
People all over the world benefit enormously from the good person in the film .A good man always do dangerous things in order to make others safe and happy so he need to conflict with bad man. By getting courage to face the enemy ,the process of struggling is adventurous, such as bleeding and injury .A good result after the war will provide people confidence to meet and conquer with disadvantage things. So a worthy reward makes it possible for people will not be afraid of wrongdoing .For example, the movie which called “the spider man” encourage so many people become much grave when they found something bad.
The advents of plays which show that bad people are being punished also warm the persons who want to make wrong things. Instead of achieving the regret consequence, they are able to see the punishment in the bad man so that they would not take risky. Large amount of potential criminals turn to good men with watching those TV programs. No one can deny that those contents of plays will give an access to people to learn from the good.
We all know that many children watching programs for several hours per day. Regard as one of the greatest educational tool of the 21tn century, movies and TV programs, which create a new way of teaching, contribute noticeably to the education of moral senses.
Children are the future masters of the world. Only they have right moral sense and appropriate courage can they be a good person to manage the world. Strictly requirement on the content of shows is one of the best approaches to helping them accomplish their goals. Considering all the analysis above, we may safely come to the conclusion that movie and TV programs should always show the audience that good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture in the Social Sciences Department

[Kitosdad]

I am really hoping to see an improvement in the work of you all this New Year. You still have a limit of two essays a day, but if you feel you need to write only one per day to show an improvement, so much the better. The vast majority have it within them to write really good essays about their topics. Take your time. Think what you want to say. Think about how you intend to say it, then review it in your mind once more before beginning to write.
Scores will be more stringently applied this year. Poor work will be scored as low as six.
If you get nine, which is going to be really difficult, make sure you write even better in your next essay. Your goal is TEN, always strive for it. It is achievable, and all of you have the ability to achieve it.
Remember what I have said repeatedly ... reading is your way forward.

If anyone submits a second essay without awaiting the edit of the first, then both essays will be ignored. All corrections will be done so that you can easily find them by reviewing the edit. You don't have to rewrite your work, just make sure that you don't repeat the same mistake again.
If you still have not mastered punctuation, then spend an hour or so in doing so. It isn't brain surgery ... just do it!
Topic titles should be checked for correctness. Posts without topic titles will also be ignored.
_________________
Keep it simple ... Keep it interesting.

[Alfonso]

Thanks dear Kitos.

That's the attitude which should and must have been applied to this forum earlier. As a matter of fact, almost each and everyday, I just lurk in this site and unfortunately I should say always I come across with really poor essay, and I think "oh, no! Not another hokum!" Some of them have so much grammatical and spelling mistakes which even elementary English learners are not expected to commit. The more the rules of teaching and the teacher himself stricter in a logical way, the higher efficiency of learning process we would achieve.