Compare and contrast your way of life with that of your parents. Which way of lif

[Sarasimp]

could you please correct my mistakes and give me some advises.thank in advance

People live their lives, create and die. Their ways of life differ from one another. The generations of my parents vary from mine today. There are a lot of contrasts between my generation and my parents’. I can explain my arguments below clearly. Today my generation has more access to global world, they are more independent. I think that with help of these ways the future generations can develop themselves.
Firstly, my generation has more access to global world. The use of Internet, open borders give us such opportunities. Many adults try to go abroad and get education at one of the famous universities. During my parents’ generation it was very difficult to go abroad. It is because they lived in the regime of Soviet Union. That regime did not allow its citizens to go abroad easily; but we can now go abroad easily and a lot of adults have their friends in the foreign countries.
Secondly, the adults are more independent today than before. My parents sometimes tell us that their parents did not allow them to choose independently what they want regarding their life or carrier. If they went against the will of their parents they would punished them by cutting money. Today my parents do not put obstacles in my way.
In conclusion, I think that the way of life that my generation lives is better than my parents’. May be, my parents think that their time was better than ours; but having access to global world and being independent is more satisfying for future generations. It will help their development.

TOEFL listening lectures: Which fact is true of Edward O. Wilson?

[Kitosdad]

Could you please correct my mistakes and give me some [b]ADVICE?
ThankS in advance.

People live their lives, create and die. Their ways of life differ from one another. The generations of my parents vary from mine today. There are a lot of contrasts between my generation and THAT OF my parents’. I can explain my arguments below clearly.

Today my generation has more access to THE global world AND they are more independent. I think that with help of these ways the future generations can develop themselves.

Firstly, my generation has more access to global world. The use of THE Internet openS borders AND giveS us such opportunities. Many adults try to go abroad and get educatED at one of the famous universities. During my parents’ generation it was very difficult to go abroad. It WAS because they lived in the regime of Soviet Union. That regime did not allow its citizens to go abroad easily; but we can now go abroad WITHOUT PROBLEMS. and a lot of adults have their friends in the foreign countries.

Secondly, the adults are more independent today than before. My parents sometimes tell us that their parents did not allow them to choose independently what they want regarding their life or CAREERS. If they went against the will of their parents they would punish them by cutting OFF THEIR money. Today my parents do not put SUCH obstacles in my way.

In conclusion, I think that the way of life IN WHICH my generation lives is better than THAT OF my parents’. Maybe my parents think that their time was better than ours; but having access to A global world and being independent is more satisfying for future generations. It will help their development.
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That was quite good Sarasimp. Keep it up.

Kitos. 8/10
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[Kitosdad]

Also Sarasimp, please note this message.

I am really hoping to see an improvement in the work of you all this New Year. You still have a limit of two essays a day, but if you feel you need to write only one per day to show an improvement, so much the better. The vast majority have it within them to write really good essays about their topics. Take your time. Think what you want to say. Think about how you intend to say it, then review it in your mind once more before beginning to write.
Scores will be more stringently applied this year. Poor work will be scored as low as six.
If you get nine, which is going to be really difficult, make sure you write even better in your next essay. Your goal is TEN, always strive for it. It is achievable, and all of you have the ability to achieve it.
Remember what I have said repeatedly ... reading is your way forward.

If anyone submits a second essay without awaiting the edit of the first, then both essays will be ignored. All corrections will be done so that you can easily find them by reviewing the edit. You don't have to rewrite your work, just make sure that you don't repeat the same mistake again.
If you still have not mastered punctuation, then spend an hour or so in doing so. It isn't brain surgery ... just do it!
Topic titles should be checked for correctness. Posts without topic titles will also be ignored.

These are serious points. To ignore them would be a big mistake on your part.
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