Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants

[Sweetcandle]

Would you correct my essay, please?

13. Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Eating habits depend on individual’s personality. While many people love to eat at
restaurant others may prefer to eat at home. In my opinion, I strongly prefer eating at home for many reasons.

First and foremost, homemade foods are healthy. People who we trust prepare it. So we will be sure of it cleanness. When we prepare our foods at home we can chose healthy and fresh ingredients. In contrast, anonymous people prepare restaurant's foods. Hence, we will never know wither the foods are healthy or not . Cretin’s diseases may transmit from person to another due to dirty kitchen and worker. So, for my own safety and because I’m a big fan of the quotes that says ‘ prevention is better than cure’ I prefer to eat at home.

Second, eating with companion of our family is pleasant. Whenever I prepare my food and join the whole family I know how blessed I am to have such a great food coupled with great family. In this wonderful atmosphere I feel happier and my appetite increase. In the other hand, sometimes restaurants tend to be busy and crowded with people. Hence, harmony is lost in such places. Although it may seems perfect place for busy workers, it’s not suitable for people who are looking for quit place after a hard day.

However, it’s good idea to eat at restaurant from time to time in order to change our life style but we should never make it a habit. For example, when I was in college my roommate and I used to enjoy cooking together everyday except for the weekend. We order a pizza from near restaurant in order to make change in our life. I have to admit that it was a great plan and it worked for us.

Finally, even though restaurants are well-decorated places with different food types still eating at home is better for healthier and long-lasting life. There is no joy like eating foods that was prepared by people who we trust.

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[Kitosdad]

[Sweetcandle]

Thanks for correcting
I would like to ask question, why did you added WOULD after WE in this sentence (We WOULD order a pizza...etc)?