Would you like to be a fashion model if you were offered the opportunity?

[Naomy]

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Would you like to be a fashion model if you were offered the opportunity? Why or why not?

Twelve years ago, There was a girl with her hair in bunches always looked at mirror and trial to ape the model’s steps like she saw on television. The girl dreamt that someday she could wear beautiful dresses and walk in catwalk stage. The girl is me and I obviously hold tight the opportunity to become a fashion model if I’m offered.

To me, the childhood dream never seems like a joke. Seriously, I think a fashion model is a good job in the modern life. In my country, a model who has just started her job is paid $50 for a show and they can be offered from 5 to 6 shows per week. This income is high here where a full meal cost only $2 and products is not expensive. When the model have more experience, signing the advertisement contract, appearing in popular magazines, her income could boom to about $25000 per month. It is really a dream of many labours working here. In addtion, The job of a model is not boring like people think. It also has competitions, so that every models alway work harder and harder. They have to practise, to adopt new ideals everyday. It is not easy but so attractive.

More individually, as talked above, becoming a model has been my dream since I was just a child, I have no reason to refuse the offered. It is wonderful to looking beautiful, dressing the most modern fashion clothes, with style hair and appearing on the front of magazines. Moreover, the job will give me a chance to meet a lot of people, to make new friends and go to many places

The dream to become a fashion model has been in my mind for long time. If I was offered the opportunity , It exactly was a present of God for. If the gift did not come, I would find my chance by all my attempt and aspiration.

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