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#1 (permalink) Wed Jan 19, 2011 3:47 am People should use more public transportation system. Do you agree or disagree? |
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Hi Kitosdad, I hope you read my essay and give me some advises. Thank you so much!!
In the recent day, developed countries and developing areas have to meet a serious problem everyday is traffic jam. No body want to be in traffic jam waiting a long time in noise. There is an easier way to transport in a big city at rush hour. It's public transportation system. There are no deniable that using a private car to move that is easier and more conveneint, people can get car to move any time that have to wait on bus stop or get a ticket for a trip by highway or train, and they can drop by somewhere when moving by car that isn’t able to do when moving by train. However, these is no use in traffic jam. The more people using public transportation the more fast and comfortable they get. Besides using public transportation will be interesting and useful because there is no need to focus on driving, and you can enjoy sitting on bus, chatting with other passengers or reading something. Japan, known as a country have the largest number of readers on the world, most of readers spend their time on train. In my opinion, using transportation public is one of the best way to relieving stress after working day . In brief, people should use public transportation to solve traffic jam , and that make you move faster and father.
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Wendynn I'm new here and I like it ;-)

Joined: 30 Mar 2010 Posts: 15 Location: HCMC, Vietnam
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#2 (permalink) Thu Jan 20, 2011 12:41 pm Re: People should use more public transportation system. Do you agree or disagree |
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| Wendynn wrote: |
Hi Kitosdad, I hope you read my essay and /give me some adviCE. / ADVISE ME./ Thank you so much!!
In recent Decades/TIMES, BOTH developed and developing COUNTRIES have to meet a serious problem WHICH IS KNOWN AS A traffic jam. No body wantS to be STUCK in A traffic jam. IN BIG CITIES, USING PUBLIC TRANSPORTATION IS an easier way to TRAVEL IN THE/DURING rush/PEAK hourS.
IT IS NOT deniable/NOBODY CAN DENY THE FACT that using a private car CAN BE easier and more conveniEnt. People can DRIVE THEIR OWN CARS to TRAVEL AT any time INSTEAD OF waitING AT THE bus stop or getTING a ticket for a trip by train. They can ALSO PULL OVER somewhere AND STOP FOR A REST WHICH IS NOT POSSIBLE WHEN USING PUBLIC TRANSPORTATION. However, these is no use in traffic jam.??(HOWEVER, THERE WILL BE MORE CARS ON THE STREETS.) The more people using public transportation the more fast and comfortable they get.??
Besides/IN ADDITION, using public transportation will be interesting and useful because there is no need to focus on driving, and you can enjoy sitting on bus, chatting with other passengers, or reading something. Japan IS A COUNTRY WHICH HAS the WORLD'S LARGEST NUMBER OF READERS, WHO SPEND MOST OF THEIR TIME TRAVELING BY TRAIN. In my opinion, using PUBLIC TRANSPORTATION is one of the best wayS to relievE stress after A BUSY working day.
In brief, people should use public transportation IN ORDER to solve traffic jamS and TRAVEL LONGER DISTANCES /WITHIN A SHORT PERIOD OF TIME/FASTER.
Hello Wendy, Hope my editing can be of some help. If I have made any mistakes, please Excuse me. All the best.
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Leenda I'm here quite often ;-)
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#3 (permalink) Thu Jan 20, 2011 13:06 pm People should use more public transportation system. Do you agree or disagree? |
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Hey, hi Leenda, our Queen!^^ So good to see you here and help other friends. Knowing your presence in this Forum will definitely speed up Kitos' recovery. Please receive my heartfelt thanks for your kindness and goodwill on behalf of Kitos. You are always Kitos' pride. Happy and success be with you ^^.
Yours sincerely, Nguyen- Kitos'henchman;-) _________________ I'll be back. I'll miss you guys so much... See you soon... |
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NguyenTrg I'm here quite often ;-)

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#4 (permalink) Thu Jan 20, 2011 16:59 pm People should use more public transportation system. Do you agree or disagree? |
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| NguyenTrg wrote: |
Hey, hi Leenda, our Queen!^^ So good to see you here and help other friends. Knowing your presence in this Forum will definitely speed up Kitos' recovery. Please receive my heartfelt thanks for your kindness and goodwill on behalf of Kitos. You are always Kitos' pride. Happy and success be with you ^^.
Yours sincerely, Nguyen- Kitos'henchman;-) |
Thanks a lot Nguyen. Very kind of you to think so well of me. I hope Kitos comes back to this Forum soon. |
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Leenda I'm here quite often ;-)
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#5 (permalink) Fri Jan 21, 2011 1:23 am People should use more public transportation system. Do you agree or disagree? |
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| thanks Leenda for help! |
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Wendynn I'm new here and I like it ;-)

Joined: 30 Mar 2010 Posts: 15 Location: HCMC, Vietnam
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| Please edit my essay and inform me about my score, Thank you in advance, Ghassem | what does success come from? |