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 #1 (permalink) Wed Jan 19, 2011 23:56 pm Has the ease of coocing improved the way people live? |
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Please rate my essay and give me some advices...
Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change
improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to
support your answer.
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World is full of numerous types of food. Even each country may famous for a specific type of food; like Sushi in Japan, Pizza in Italy, etc. Nowadays, we can cook and prepare the food easier than before, but this great change in preparing food improved significantly the way people life.
Very long time ago, human was getting his food by hunting and he was preparing his food using traditional ways which takes hours for finished. Then, he knew some new types of food like vegetables and corns, which can prepared faster. But he was planting it and prepared it by his simple tools, but it was a hard work and takes a lot of time. So he always work on explore new foods, learn new skills for cooking, and invent new tools and techniques to eat new and delicious food in less time.
Today, people cook and prepare their food very faster than before. They have amazing new tools like microwave ovens and refrigerators, and they are cooking by new methods with putting artificial flavors on their food which make it much delicious, they also can eat types of food from anywhere in the world due to the improvement in the transportation, and there are a lot of restaurants which offer what is called “Fast-Foods”. This great change makes people eat with no waste time, they even eat during driving and their work.
This change is very suitable with the fast life today. But if we look abstractly, we will find that this change in preparing foods have as I see another kind of improvement. A lot of new foods and fast foods are not nutrient so depending only on it is very dangerous; also it makes people eat individually, so the advantage of gathering family members around a meal is lost.
No doubt preparing food easier than before have a great influence in the life today, but we still have to be careful with its disadvantages.
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| #2 (permalink) Thu Jan 20, 2011 0:54 am Re: Has the eas of coocing improved the way people live? |
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| Mmarzook wrote: |
Please rate my essay and give me some advices...
Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change
improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to
support your answer.
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World is full of numerous types of food. Each country IS famous for a specific type of food; like Sushi in Japan, Pizza in Italy, etc. Nowadays, we can cook and prepare food easier than before, but this great change in preparing food improved significantly the way people LIVE.
Very long time ago, MAN was getting his food by hunting and was preparing his food using traditional ways which TOOK hours TO FINISH. Then, he CAME TO KNOW some new types of food like vegetables and corns, which COULD BE prepared faster. But he PLANTED and preparED it by his simple tools. IT was a hard work and tOOK a lot of time. So he always workED on explorING new foods, learnT new skills for cooking, and inventED new tools and techniques to eat new and delicious food in less time.
Today, people cook and prepare their food faster than before. They have amazing new tools like microwave ovens and refrigerators. They are cooking USING new methods, putting artificial flavors on their food which make THEM mORE delicious. They can ALSO eat VARIOUS types of food from anywhere in the world due to the improvement in the transportation. There are a lot of restaurants which offer what is called “Fast-Food”. This great change makes people eat with no wastAGE OF time, they even eat WHILE driving and DURING their work.
This change is very suitable FOR the TODAY'S FAST LIFE. But if we look abstractly, we will find OUT that this change in preparing foods have ,as I see, another kind of improvement. A lot of new foods and fast foods are not nutriTIOUS, so depending only on it is very dangerous; OR makes people eat individually, the advantage of gathering family members around a meal is lost.
No doubt NOW preparing food easier than before have a great influence in the life today, but we still have to be careful with its disadvantages.
HI Mmar I checked your essay. I made some alterations in it. Beee will better evaluate your essay and will better guide you in this regard. I didn't understand one thing why did you mention about its disadvantages in the end. Why not in the middle somewhere? Well keep on reading and practicing, which is the basic rule of developing a good essay:)
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| #3 (permalink) Thu Jan 20, 2011 1:44 am Has the ease of coocing improved the way people live? |
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Dear Babo,
I appreciate your help.
About your question, I took about its disadvantages in the fourth paragraph. So I thought I had to mention it in the conclusion.
I will take your advice and I will keep Practicing.
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| #4 (permalink) Thu Jan 20, 2011 3:24 am Has the ease of coocing improved the way people live? |
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Babo, really really good work. I am sure that Teacher Kitos will be very very proud of you if he knows your kindness and goodwill towards friends here. He must be glad to know you guys checking others'essays and taking care of each other. On behalf of Kitos, I thank you with all my heart. Happy and success be with you my friend >:D<
Yours sincerely,
Nguyen-Kitos' henchman. ;-)
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| #5 (permalink) Thu Jan 20, 2011 3:51 am Has the ease of coocing improved the way people live? |
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ha ha thanks.
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