Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits. Do you agree?

[Beefik]

Topic: Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits. Do you agree with the following statement?

Please rate my essay!!! Many thanks, beefik :)

Nowadays television is a powerful source of information as well as a great entertainment provider. While flicking through the channels viewers come across numerous advertisements tempting with fattening snacks, sweets wrapped in colourful packagings and tasty looking ready cooked meals. People blame advertising for promoting unhealthy products but are they realy the most important cause of bad eating habits? I would like to express my opinion about this subject.

To begin with, our lifestyles have changed over the years. We live in a constatnt rush, we work longer hours and experience heavy traffic. Women are professionally active and struggle to find time for cooking after an exhausting day at work place. In this case pre-cooked meals or takeways are perfect solutions to feed busy and hungry family.

Secondly, fast food bars and restaurants are visible literally on every corner of the street an the choice is enormous. With variety of cuisine offered by local amenities even the most demanding consumer would not be bored. Prevalence of all kinds of buffets and junk food outlets creates indolence which leads to obesity, diabetes and hart diseases.

People ought to learn self-control and responsibility when it comes to food choices. Compelling smell and taste need to be abandoned in favour of healthy life of an individual as well as a whole family.

To recapitulate, advertising is purely one tiny reason why people reach for unhealthy food. Justifying bad eating habist with lack of time is also inappropriate. To my mind, a strong input should be implied on food education in order to make people realise how harmful saturated fats and sugars are and how dramatic consequences they can bring in the future.

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[Remula]

[Honest4ever]

Personally, I think Beefik your essay is not related to Advertising (the major idea of the topic) adequately.
Good luck!

[Remula]

Yes, the topic must be is it good to use fast food?

Anyway, try again and read other athours' essays.

Best regards

[Remula]

Phenterminox1,

You should open a new topic for every essay, don't paste them in others' topics.

Beefik,

Here is a sample essay to the TOEFL question about advertising. Read it please

Advertising
Advertisements, one of the symbols of the modern society, are prevailing in every part of the world. Widespread and influential, advertisements are capable of convincing people to purchase commodities that they do not need. Among various factors that contribute to the phenomenon is the temptation of seeming lower price, the influence of celebrities and, in some cases, the exaggerated functions of the products.
The foremost reason for the phenomenon is that hardly anyone is able to resistant to the tempting low price, which is a trick played by the sly and shrewd merchants. For example, there are always so many products on sale that few of us are able to be sensible and rational enough not to be lured by the huge price tags with "sale" on them. As a matter of fact, the buyers are hooked by the seeming discount. By frenetic and irrational shopping, people would stock up piles of items that they actually will not be in need of in the foreseeable future or even for the rest of their lives.
Another subtle explanation rests on the fact that celebrities, who have been paid a considerable sum of money, play an important role in the effect of advertisements. Some famous stars are so influential that companies focus their attention on them and make the best use of their fame. As a result, a group of loyal fans would rush into stores and go into rapture if they are fortunate enough to possess one. Consequently, both the stars and the sellers benefit from the commercial game, regardless of what the consumers obtained.
The third convincing reason I would like to mention is that the exaggeration made in the advertisements by the merchants is also deceitful. It is, undoubtedly, confusing and puzzling for ordinary consumers to distinguish the unqualified ones from millions of products presented in front of them. In addition, a majority part of the merchants, some of whom are inadequate and inferior, are in the disguise of appealing appearances. Consequently, if is of no wonder that consumers would buy products preached to be perfect, a considerable number of them are nothing but a waste of money. Naturally, it is probably too reckless to maintain that advertising is a matter of cheating since some accompanying merits also come along with it, such as the aesthetic values.
However, the minor advantages will never prevent us from concluding that advertisements attract consumers to purchase useless products, because of their so called discount, the effect of celebrities and the boastful description.

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[Beefik]

Hi Remula,

Thanks a lot for your help !!! Now I understand how an essay should be written. I'll spend more time on reading and then try to post my next writing attempt. Have a good day :)

Beefik

[Beefik]

Would you find time to read my essay about glibalization? Is it any better than the other one?
I'm at work at the moment but still trying to find some time for reading :)