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Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family. #1 (permalink) Fri Jan 21, 2011 10:31 am   Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family.
 

Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family. What are the causes of this phenomenon and what problems has it brought to families and society as a whole?
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In this day and age, the human society is progressing rapidly on various fronts. Many modern technologies were invented by human such as cars, computers and Internet, and the efficiency in business transactions and production has been greatly enhanced. But advances in technology lead to our pace of life much more faster than before, people have no enough time with their family. In this essay, I would like to analyze some possible causes of this phenomenon and it is influence for families and society.

It is evident that the causes of this phenomenon are diverse. In the first place, advancing in technology to improve the efficiency of production, but also cause people to do more things at the same time. Moreover, this is especially true when we consider the fact that the global financial crisis in recent years has led many people to fear losing their job, and the significant raising costs of live which needs people to work harder than before. Furthermore, employees that working for multination companies may be scattered at whole world. For example, my friend often holds a meeting at middle-night with his colleague who stays in U.S. and he still needs to work at daytime.

In my opinion, the impact of this phenomenon on families and society is profound. People do not have enough time to spend with their family, especially with their children. They may spend much time in front of TV or computer games that there has much violence and pornography may seriously influence children’s growth if without parents’ guidance. Further, the increasingly over-speed lifestyle will engender a higher incidence of ailments. More instances about employee sudden death at his/her workplace are reported by media and we must make reflection.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that people should spend more time with their family because families are the cornerstone of the society. This is no longer a problem for individual families, but for society as a whole.

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Re: Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family. #2 (permalink) Fri Jan 21, 2011 13:09 pm   Re: Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family.
 

Garfield_Cat wrote:
Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family. What are the causes of this phenomenon and what problems has it brought to families and society as a whole?
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In this day and age/AT THE PRESENT TIME, the human society is progressing rapidly on various fronts. Many modern technologies were invented by human BEINGS such as cars, computers and THE Internet, and the efficiency in business transactions and production has been greatly enhanced. ALTHOUGH, advances in technology HELP US to DO THINGS MORE QUICKLY THAN before/NORMAL, people DO NOT FIND enough time TO SPEND with their familIES. In this essay, I would like to analyze some possible causes of this phenomenon and itS influence ON families and society.

It is evident that the causes of this phenomenon are diverse. DESPITE THE FACT THAT advancES in technology CAN improve the efficiency of production, THEY CAN cause people to do more things at the same time. This is especially true when we consider the fact that the global financial/ECONOMIC crisis in recent years has led many people to HAVE THE fear OF losing their jobS, and the significant INCREASE IN cost of livING needs/REQUIRES people to work harder than before. Furthermore, employees WHO ARE working for multinationAL companies may be scattered AROUND THE world/GLOBE. For example, my friend often holds a meeting at midnight with his colleague who stays in THE U.S. and he still needs to work at daytime.?

In my opinion, the impact of this phenomenon on families and society is profound. People do not have enough time to spend with their familIES, especially with their children. They may spend much time in front of THE TV or computers PLAYING games. AS WE KNOW, WATCHING A VIOLENT SCENE/FILM and pornography may seriously influence children’s growth without parents’ guidance. FurtherMORE, the increasingly over-speed/FAST-PACED lifestyle will engender a higher incidence of ailments. More instances OF sudden death at workplace are BEING reported IN THE media and (we must make reflection.)????

To put it in a nutshell, I INSIST ON saying that people should spend more time with their familIES because /THE FAMILY UNIT IS/ the cornerstone of society. This is no longer a problem for individual families, but for society as a whole.?

Hello Garfield,
I tried to improve your essay. I hope you don't mind.
Good Luck!

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Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family. #3 (permalink) Fri Jan 21, 2011 16:52 pm   Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family.
 

Good work, for both of you!
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Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family. #4 (permalink) Mon Jan 24, 2011 4:17 am   Today, many people are too busy to spend enough time with their family.
 

To Leenda: thank you very much. XD
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