High income of international entertainers are justified?

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Income of superstars, including international sports personalities has created a major controversy among the public.In fact, they often get paid millions dollars every year whereas many people in the world have to live in poor conditions.In that regard, I do not think that such a huge salary of international stars is justified.
In the first place, various other people are also contributing so much to society.Doctors spend at least their 10 years studying and practising,their works save lives.Teachers educated and insipred students to help them become responsible and good citizens.They have no claim to fame.However, many of them even do not receive enough to survive and raise their family.The position of a star in society is undeniable but it in no way should exceed its of others.
Secondly,some international entertainers spend their money unreasonably while many children are living in low quality.In reality there are some famous stars are wasting too much on luxurious parties,enjoy exculsive pastimes.They even take drugs and get caught.In the meantime,many children have to live in slum dog and have not enough money to go to school.They must deserve enjoying a better life.
To sum up, it is obvious that poverty in the world, along with a series of other problems, is serious.However, they will be solved partly when money is contributed appropriately and fairly.

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