students should be required to study art and music in school. Agree/Disagree?

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

Humans should develop all aspects of their life and find out what they enjoy most. Learning mathematics is necessary, but is not all that mankind can do. Brain is significantly capable of learning, and we have to use this ability. I greatly agree of teaching art and music in secondary school due to follow reasons.

First of all, art in all kinds, enhance spirit. They make people relax and express their feeling in beautiful way of conveying. When people share their feeling, sadness or happiness, they feel well. A person who have lost a valuable treasure in his life, sing a song; People who hear the song, express their condolences, and the person is no longer isolated with the sorrow. Art breeds creativity; children will learn to solve their problems with new ways they create. Crowd’s claps after a music performance, makes people to proud of themselves. Learners can have fun when engaged with artistic activity. Painting imaginary characters or someone with funny face has huge pleasure.

After hard working or studying, having some free acting can play resting role in life. Art frees mind from routine daily activities. Variety is the salt of life; art provides variety. Learning all day just formulas, sooner or later will be boring. So there should be something other than dry digits and signs.

Human has vast range of talents. Each person should find out with which field they are best or they enjoy most. Teaching art not only has undeniable positive influences, but also can detect talents. Maybe some students like art most and choose their future to be professional artist. Societies need artist as well as they need engineers or doctors. Artists are doctors of mind and they are responsible about health of feelings.

Societies require artist as they need doctors or engineers. Artists make people feel better and teach them express their feeling in beautiful ways. Schools should discover children's talent and direct them. Teaching Art and music at schools can find talents, and can encourage learners to look more beautifully to life and create what they like to what they want.

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