Earning only a comfortable living is enough yet?

[Jane Le]

Making money is the thing that almost people in this society care about. Some people want to earn money just to have the both ends meet, while others think that it is really crucial to make a large amount of money. As for as i have known, everyone needs to earn money to be able to take care of themselve, however, when you just focus on making money because you think you have not enough, some problems will occur.

For the first reason, it is really hard to earn money at the moment due to the jobs that one can have. You can work as a worker in a factory, you have three children and a wife. Of course you have to work hard to have money to pay for your family's daily fees. Because your job is a low paid one so when you have a comfortable amount of money that can help your family, you will feel satisfied. You have no time or health to think about other stuffs. Therefore, sometimes, it is really good when you can feel delighted with your own money.

On the other hand, the society is developing rapidly, and human want to improve their life as well so they try to make as much money as they can. They do not just want to have money only to pay bills or normal clothes, nevertheless, people want to have a more fabulous life than the one they are having. Moreover, some people want to have credibilities for their future, when they retire, for example, so they work more to earn money. Hence, those are some good purposes for ones to make more money even when they have just enough.

But for the most part, I believe people should be happy with what they have. Because, when they take the making of money so serious, there will have some negative effects. For example, people spend more time to work but they do not have enough time for their family. And also, they will try too hard and pay no attention to their own thing such as health, relationship, etc.That affects quiet much their life like family goes apart, children get naughty, or even you have a cancer. What money can do for you when you are dead cause being exhausted for a long time?

Everything has two sides, just like money: enough money is equal as a peaceful life, too much thoughts on money is as well as misery. Therefore, you should keep yourself satisfied with what you get and try your best to have a better life if you can.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a student and a campus patrolman

[Sabrinayaa]

Making money is the thing that almost(I think if you use most here would more appropriate ) people in this society care about. Some people want to earn money just to have the both ends meet, while others think that it is really crucial to make a large amount of money. As for as I have known, everyone needs to earn money to be able to take care of themselve; however, some problems will occur when you just focus on making money because you think you have not enough,.

For the first reason, it is really hard to earn money at the moment due to the jobs that one can have(?!?). You can work as a worker in a factory, you have three children and a wife. In fact you have to work hard to have money paid for your family's daily fees. Because your job is a low paid one so when you have a comfortable amount of money that can help your family, you will feel satisfied. You have no time or passion to think about other stuffs. Therefore, sometimes, it is really good when you can feel delighted with your limited money.

On the other hand, the society is developing rapidly, and human want to improve their life conditions as well, so they try to make as much money as they can. They do not just want to have money only to pay bills or normal clothes, nevertheless, people want to have a more fabulous life than the one they are having. Moreover, some people want to have credibilities for their future after they retire.for example, so they work more to earn money. Hence, those are some good purposes for ones to make more money even when they have just enough.

But for the most part, I believe people should be happy with what they have. Because, when they take the making of money [color=red]into account so serious, there some negative effects[color=red]would occur[/color]. For example, people spend more time to working but they do not have enough time for their family. And also, they will try too hard and pay no attention to their own things such as health, relationships, and so on.That affects quiet a lot in their life like family goes apart, children get naughty, or even you will have a cancer. What money can do for you when you are dead because being exhausted for a long time?

Everything has two sides, just like money: enough money is equal as a peaceful life, too much thoughts on money is as well as misery(not good). Therefore, you should keep yourself satisfied with what you get and try your best to have a better life if you can.


Hi, I think you use too many colloquial words in your essay, like etc, cause...

[Katty2010]

Hey Jane, Hope you had a fine exam today. Good Luck! :)
As far as this essay is concerned I'll check it asap.
Sabrinayaa your correction still has few errors.
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[Katty2010]

Making money is the thing that almost ALL people in this WORLD care about. Some people want to earn money just to have the both ends meet, while others think that it is really crucial to make a large amount of money. As for as i have known, everyone needs to earn money to be able to take care of themselve, however, when you just focus on making money because you think you have not enough, some problems will occur.

For the first reason FIRSTLY, it is really hard to earn money at theSE DAYS . You can IF YOU work as a worker in a factory AND have a FAMILY TO SUPPORT you WILL have to work hard to EARN money to pay for your family's daily NEEDS -fees-. Because your job is a low paid one so When you have a comfortable amount of money that can help your family, you will feel satisfied. You have no time or health to think about other stuffs. Therefore, sometimes, it is really good when you can feel SATISFIED with WHAT YOU EARN your own money.

On the other hand, the WORLD is developing rapidly and humanS want to improve their life STYLES as well so they try to make as much money as they can. They do not just want to have money only to pay bills, nevertheless, people want to have LUXURY more fabulous life than the one they are having AND OPT FOR BETTER LIVING. Moreover, some people want to have credibilities for their future, when they retire, so they work more to earn money. Hence, those are some good REASONS -purposes for ones- FOR PEOPLE to make EARN more money even when they have just enough.

But for the most part, I believe people should be happy with what they have. Because, when they take EARNING the making of money so VERY seriousLY, theY will have some negative effects. For example, people WHO spend more time AT work they do not have enough time TO SPEND WITH their family. And also, they will try too hard and pay no attention to their own -thing such as- health, relationshipS, etc.That affects quiet much their life, FOR INSTANCE family GROWS apart, children TURN naughty, or THEY GET ILL BY STRESS . What money can MONEY do for you when you are dead BEcause OF being exhausted for a long time?

ALL IN ALL Everything has two sides, just like money: enough money is ENOUGH FOR A peaceful life, too much thoughts on money LEADS TO misery. Therefore, you should keep yourself satisfied with what you get and try your best to LEAD A SIMPLE life.

Hey nice essay :)!
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[Cristina.ro]

Hi guys, just to point out three mistakes that both Sabrinayaa and Katty seem to have missed:

[Jane Le]

wow thank you guys so much! I took the test but haven't got the result :s i will tell you when i got it. By the way, it's really helpful to correct all the grammatical errors that i made, but none of you have analyze if those ideas are convincing or not.