essay:why so you think it is that some people enjoy engaging in dangerous sports

[Avinash125]

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TOPIC:: why do you think it is that some people enjoy engaging in dangerous sports.



Although there are many sports available which are not dangerous but many people like to do dangerous sports, not only for fun but to overcome from stress and boring life. In this essay I will demonstrate many points to give reasons why people enjoy dangerous sports.

First, engaging in life threatening sports can help people to overcome their fear and to discover internal power and their potential talents and abilities. Let me take an example I remember my friend was always scared of looking downside from the height altitude. However after taking training of trekking he became a great trekker. So, these activities improve his internal ability and help to find great Career.

Furthermore, some people want to try extreme sports because they want to experience and enjoy strong feelings. In fact many dangerous sports bring strong feelings, but once get familiar with that feelings they can enjoy them. For example, lot of people afraid to jump out of the flight when they do sky diving first time. However many people say that they enjoy the feeling of free falling and see the nature from high altitude.

Finally, life threatening games make people happy. With some people, normal things in daily life are so boring so by engaging into dangerous games they can reduce their pressure of work load and change the way of life from day to day office activities.

In conclusion, I would say that people are attracted towards life threatening games for different reasons, either to discover their internal abilities and capabilities or to make strong feelings and to overcome from stress of work.

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[Avinash125]

hi,,

please check my essay. I am taking toefl on 19th march. I am worried because this is my 3rd time and in last 2 test I got only 65 and 70 but I need at least 90 or above.
I have problem in my reading and listening section specially in reading part.
So please help me out, this is a last chance for me to prove myself.

Thanks

[Katty2010]

Hey Avinash I'll check your essay soon. For Listening, listen to English dramas, conversation, academic lessons, discovery channel on tv and read almost what ever material you get. Try to go through essay once. Then read first question, check first paragraph of essay, find answer then move to next question. Time your self because its very important. Work hard.
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[Katty2010]

why do you think it is that some people enjoy engaging in dangerous sports.

Although there are many sports available which are not dangerous but many people like to do PLAY dangerous sports., not only for fun but to overcome from stress and boring life. In this essay I will demonstrate many points to give reasons why people enjoy dangerous sports.

FirstLY, engaging in life threatening sports can help people overcome their fearS and to discover THEIR internal power and, their potential talents and abilities. Let me take an FOR example I remember my friend was always scared of looking downside from the height HIGH altitudeS. However after taking training of FOR trekking he became a great trekker. So, these activities improveED his internal ability TO OVERCOME FEAR and helpED HIM to find A great Career.

Furthermore, some people want to try extreme sports because they want to experience and enjoy strong feelings adrenaline rush. In fact many dangerous sports bring strong feelings FEAR, but once YOU get familiar with that feelings SPORT YOU can enjoy them. For example, lot of people ARE afraid to jump out of the flight when they do sky diving FOR THE first time. However many people say that they enjoy the feeling of free falling and see the nature from high altitude.

Finally, life threatening games make people happy. With some people, normal things in daily life are so GET boring so by engaging into dangerous games they can reduce their pressure of work load and change the way of life from day to day office activities.

In conclusion, I would say that people are attracted towards life threatening games for different reasons, either to discover their internal abilities and capabilities or to make strong feelings and to overcome from stress of work.

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Good Essay. Capability and ability mean same thing.
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[Cristina.ro]

Although there are many sports available which are not dangerous, but many people like to do dangerous sports, not only for fun but to overcome from stress and boring life. In this essay I will demonstrate many points to give SOME reasons why people enjoy dangerous sports.

First, engaging in life threatening ENDANGERING sports can help people to overcome their fearS and to discover THEIR internal power, and their potential talents and abilities. Let me take an FOR example I remember my friend was always USED TO BE scared of looking downside from the height HIGH altitudeS. However, after taking training of FOR trekking he became a great trekker. So, these activities improveD his internal ability and helpED HIM to find A great career.

Furthermore, some people want to try extreme sports because they want to experience and enjoy strong feelings SENSATIONS. In fact, many dangerous sports bring strong feelings OF FEAR, but once ONE getS familiar with that OVER THOSE feelings, they can enjoy them THE THRILL OF THESE SPORTS. For example, A lot of people ARE afraid to jump out of the flight AN AIRPLANE when they do TRY sky diving FOR THE first time. However, many people say that they enjoy the feeling of free falling and seeING the nature SCENERY from high altitude GREAT HEIGHTS.

Finally, life threatening RISKING games make people happy. With TO some people, normal things in daily life are so boring so, by engaging into dangerous games ACTIVITIES they can reduce their pressure of work load STRESS CAUSED BY THEIR WORKLOAD and change theIR way of life from day to day office activities DAILY ROUTINE.

In conclusion, I would say that people are attracted towards life threatening games EXTREME SPORTS for different reasons: either to discover their internal abilities and capabilities STRENGTHS or to make strong feelings EXPERIENCE THE ADRENALINE RUSH, and to overcome from stress of work WORK-RELATED STRESS.
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Hi Avinash,

I think you should not use the same terms too many times -- that is why I replaced 'high altitude' with 'great heights' or 'life threatening sports' with 'life endangering sports'/'life risking sports' etc. Besides, 'life threatening sports' seems wrong to me, but it could be that it is just not very commonly used.

Just a second opinion from another learner. Good luck with your exam.
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[Avinash125]

Hi Katty,

Thankyou so much for checking my essay and for useful comments.
I appreciate your time.

[Avinash125]

Hi Cristina,

Thanks for checking my essay. I used to read your comments and post, its really helpful for me. With comments please rate my essay also. I appreciate your time.

[Cristina.ro]

Avinash, I am glad that you find reading my posts helpful (well, maybe a few of them, I should add :-P), but let's not get carried away here: I cannot grade your essay, I am no teacher! :-)
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[Katty2010]

Sorry to say cristina, but some other checkers on here are giving grades. There is nothing wrong with that, even if grades are low. They are meant to enocurage writers to write better. So please do not make rules because you are not a head over here.

Avinash I m glad I could help :) 7.5/10
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[Cristina.ro]

[Katty2010]

:P Dont worry I am relaxed. I did write constructive comment if I remember:) Any way have a nice day!
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[Avinash125]

Heyy guys,

Thankyou so much.
I always welcome and appreciate if you will give rating to my essay but there is no compulsion because your comments are more important for me than the rating.

Please check my another essays also, because I think I am making lots of grammatical and other mistakes.

Thanks