Please Someone Check My Essay:: How do one's clothing clothes affect him or her

[Avinash125]

Please check my essay.............

Also please help me to write its conclusion because I was little bit confused.

Topic:: do you agree or disagree? How do one's clothing clothes affect him or her?

Although many person do not care and pay attention to their clothes and they select or wear whatever they find. I believe, clothing can affect individuals in many ways. In this essay I will enumerate some reasons for how one's clothing garments can affect person.

First, wearing costumes according to occasion can make difference in individual's attitude or behavior. For example, formal dress at job interview can improve their self confidence. In the same way party wear into wedding party can give feelings of happiness or in non formal or casual clothes person can feel more comfortable and relax. So, I believe it is very necessary to decide clothes according to the circumstances or situations to avoid anxiety and uncomfortable .

Furthermore, in my view not only clothes but clothe's color also matters in individual's personality. In other words science had proved that different colors create different influences on human being nature. For instance light color can relax your nerve system as well as yours or others eye sight. On the other hand dark colors are helpful to attract people towards you like red and black color. Additionally, mostly people select or choose outfit's color according to their body shape or skin color to look more attractive.

Finally, wearing apparel can describe your internal beauty or inner personality. It means your outer impression will be more helpful for others to decide your qualities and character. For example, if you always dress up very clean and suitable clothes then others may be think about you that you have good choice and test or you can take care of yours so they can believe and trust on you that your work will be organized and cleaned.

In conclusion, I do agree that one's clothing clothes can affect her/ him for various reasons, because the way of wearing cloths can build their self confidence, can improve inner or outer personality.

TOEFL listening discussions: What is the main weakness of the student's essay?

[Pasban110]

Although many person PEOPLE do not care and pay attention to their clothes(,) and they CHOOSE or wear whatever they find. I believe, clothing can affect individuals in many ways. In this essay I will enumerate some reasons for how one's clothing garments can affect person HIM/HER.

First, wearing costumes according to AN occasion can make A CONSIDERABLE difference in individuals' - SEE * attitude or behavior. For example, formal dressING at A job interview can improve INCREASE their * is here - YOU used THEIR which it is plural self(-)confidence. In the same way party wear COSTUMES into A wedding party can give feelings of happiness(. - RUN-ON SCENTENCE) or in A non(-)formal <- OR NO SPACE or casual clothes person can feel more comfortable and relax. So, I believe it is very necessary to decide clothes according to the circumstances or situations to avoid anxiety and uncomfortable DISCORD - means "lack of agreement or harmony".

Furthermore, in my view OPINION sounds good instead of VIEW(,) not only clothes/CLOTHING but clothe's THEIR/ITS color also matters/AFFECT(S) in individual's personality. In other words THE science had HAS proved that different colors create different influences on human being nature. For instance(,) light color can relax your nerve NERVOUS system as well as yours or others eye sight. On the other hand(,) dark colors(see **) are helpful to attract people towards youRSELF(.) (**: move this part to previous **. Besides, I think these colors make you feel angry and depressed, respectively) ,like red and black color,. Additionally, mostly people select or choose outfit's colorS according to their body shape or skin - It is parallel, so no needed color to look more attractive.

Finally, wearing apparelS can describe your internal beauty or inner personality. It means your outer impression will be more helpful for others to decide ON your qualities and characterISTIC. For example, if you always dress up very clean and suitable clothes, then others may be WILL think about you that you have good choice and test or you can take care of yours so they can believe and trust on you that your work will be - Mixed up here, so I crossed it out as A NEAT, TIDY, AND ORGANIZED PERSON .

To sum up, as I mentioned above, clothing shows our personality and characteristic. Circumstances themselves want us to keep respect of ourselves and others. With a good outfit we can take the advantage of attraction, and it can change the views about ourselves. The color of our clothes shows our feelings, and it can affect on the people around us. The way we choose our clothes shows that how tidy and responsible we are. So, good wearing has a lot of advantages to us.

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In conclusion, I do agree that one's clothing clothes can affect her/ him for various reasons, because the way of wearing cloths can build their self confidence, can improve inner or outer personality.


P.S.
Why do you use two synonyms together? for example:
select CHOOSE or wear
non-formal or casual
circumstances or situations
attitude or behavior
internal beauty or inner personality

P.S.S
A funny phenomenon, I did the following correction:
On the other(,) hand dark colors...
And I thought, "My! what kind of colors are hand dark colors," and after re-reading the phrase, I corrected it as On the other hand(,) dark colors ...
LOL!

P.S.S.S
I will be thankful if anyone correct my corrections again. It will not bother me at all!

[Katty2010]

Pasban, about your earlier question, I am learning java. Sorry for writing this in this discussion. Totally inappropriate I know.
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