Can I get some feedback for my essay please :)

[Siakk]

You should never tell a lie even if the truth hurt someone.

We live in a world which develops more and more day after day. We meet different people and face with the new requirements of the new day. However, relationships between people have never changed through time. We care for the ones we love and we don’t lie to them. That is an unwritten rule we should follow.
To begin with, some people would agree with the statement that sometimes you can tell a lie in order not to hurt somebody you love. I strongly disagree. I have no explanation for how this actually happens, but I know for a fact that lies always come up at a certain point of our life. Especially when we share it with the one we lied to.
In addition, I believe that if you really care about a certain person you will never do something that might hurt himher. I believe that once you have lied, there comes a point when you have to lie again in order to protect your first false statement. And sooner or later you will give up and you will be forced to admit the truth. Sometimes when this happens in a relationship it doesn’t really matter what you have lied for, it matter that you did lie. Even if your beloved forgives you, both of you will always remember this, especially heshe.
Furthermore, I am strongly convinced that no matter what the world have prepared for us and have faced us with, we should always have somebody to share it with. When I was younger I lied to my mom and to my friends about tiny things which wouldn’t matter if I had simply apologized. Once I was home alone and I broke my mommy`s vase. After she found out I denied to have broken it, thinking that I might get away with this. The result was that mom was angry and I had lied. If I had simply admitted and apologized, she would be angry again but not as much as she was then. When I think about this situation now I realize how stupid my reaction was, but at least I have learned my lesson.
To sum up, I believe that we must be honest with one another. Everyday we hear on the news so many different and amazing stories, we read about exceptional things that people have done. I think that day after day it gets harder to surprise the world with our story. So why lie? Let`s share it and the people who love us will support us, because that’s why they are there for us.

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[Sabrinayaa]

[Siakk]

Thank you very much :) the last paragraph really sounds kinda .. bad, reading it now :) thank you again .. what score do you think i might get on this one?

[Katty2010]

We live in a world which IS developING more and more day after day. We meet different people and face with the new requirements of the new day ALMOST EVERYDAY. However, relationships between people have never changed through time. We care for the ones we love and we don’t lie to them. That is an unwritten rule we should follow.Some people would agree with the statement that sometimes you can tell a lie in order not to hurt somebody you love. I strongly disagree.

To begin with, some people would agree with the statement that sometimes you can tell a lie in order not to hurt somebody you love. I strongly disagree. ALTHOUGH I have no explanation for how this actually happens, but I know for a fact that lies always come up at a certain point of our life. Especially when we share it with the one we lied to.

In addition, I believe that if you really care about a certain person you will never do something that might hurt him/her. I believe that once you have lied, there comes a point when you have to lie again in order to protect your first false statement. And sooner or later you will give up and you will be forced to admit the truth. Sometimes when this happens in a relationship it doesn’t really matter what you have lied for, it matter that you did lie. Even if your beloved forgives you, both of you will always remember this, especially he/she.

Furthermore, I am strongly convinced that no matter what the world have prepared for us and have faced us with, we should always have somebody to share it with. When I was younger I lied to my mom and to my friends about tiny things which wouldn’t matter if I had simply apologized. Once I was home alone and I broke my mommy`s vase. After she found out I denied to have broken it, thinking that I might get away with this. The result was that MY mom was angry and THAT I had lied. If I had simply admitted and apologized, she would be angry again but not as much as she was then. When I think about this situation now I realize how stupid my reaction was, but at least I have learned my lesson.

To sum up, I believe that we must be honest with one another. Everyday we hear on the news so many different and amazing stories, we read about exceptional things that people have done. I think that day after day it gets harder to surprise the world with our story. So why lie? THEN WHY SHOULD WE LIE? Let`s share it THE TRUTH and the people who love us will support us, because that’s why they are there for us.

Hey Good Essay, I am not a teacher but I think you deserve 8/10 :)!
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