life-span(cause)

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People who live in urban areas have shorter life than people who live in the country. It is an undeniable fact under no circumstance can right to life be taken away or restricted, yet there are various reasons of having a shorter life in urban areas such as pollution, stress as well as crime.

To commence with, pollution can be regarded as the most remarkable cause of having a shorter life. It is a well-known fact that there are numerous factories and motor vehicles on the roads in urban areas and this leads to an increase in the level of toxic gases in the air. In addition, water is the most important substance for human beings. It is impossible for people, animals and plants to live without water as well as water pollution have begun to pose a serious threat for living creatures. In short, there is a strong correlation between pollution and life-span.

Apart from pollution, stress can also be viewed as the most significant cause of having a shorter life. It goes without saying that millions of people are affected by stress and stress related diseases. We know that the first cause is living in urban areas. For instance, when driving a car, drivers' psychology is one the most significant issues. Should the traffic move bumper to bumper, drivers will blow a fuse and this leads to stress. Even this example would be adequate on its own to prove the importance of stress.

Last but not least, it is possible to see a lot of people who cannot make ends meet or to send their children to school. They are aware of the fact that the responsibilities of supporting their family belong to them. Therefore, they tend to commit crimes as a last resort; such as stealing something. To illustrate, when an individual or burglar attempts to rob jeweler, he/she naturally is to be in self-defense and may kill him. As a consequence, crime makes contribute to having a shorter life.

All in all, the obvious conclusion to be drawn would be that stress and pollution are two important reasons of having a shorter life. The less stress and pollution there is, the more peaceful and longer life will be. Therefore, people should be aware of the dangers of stress and pollution and they should take variety of measures in an attempt to escape from it.

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People LIVING in urban areas have A shorter life than THOSE LIVING in the COUNTRYSIDE. It is an undeniable fact under no circumstance can right to life be taken away or restricted (SO CONFUSED), yet there are various reasons/IMPACTS/FACTORS LEADING TO a shorter life in urban areas(,) such as pollution, stress as well as crime.

To commence with, pollution can be regarded as the most remarkable cause of having a shorter life. It is a well-known fact that there are numerous factories and motor vehicles in urban areas and, LEADING to an increase in the level of toxic gases in the air. In addition, water is the most important substance for human beings. It is impossible for people, animals and plants to live without water. HOWEVER, water pollution HAS begun to pose a serious threat for living creatures. In short, there is a strong correlation between pollution and life-span.

Apart from pollution, stress can also be viewed as the most significant cause of having a shorter life. It goes without saying that millions of people are affected by stress and stress-related diseases. We know that the first cause is living in urban areas. For instance, when driving a car, drivers' psychology is one the most significant issues. Should/IN CASE/IF the traffic move bumper to bumper, drivers will blow a fuse and this leads to stress. Even this example would be adequate on its own to prove the importance of stress.

Last but not least, it is possible to see a lot of people who cannot make ends meet or to send their children to school. They are aware of the fact that the responsibilities of supporting their family belongS to them. Therefore, they tend to commit crimes as a last resort; such as stealing something. To illustrate, when an individual or A burglar attempts to rob jewelRY, he/she is NATURALLY in HIS self-defense and may kill SOMEBODY. As a consequence, crime makes A contributION to having a shorter life.

All in all, the obvious conclusion to be drawn would be that stress and pollution are two important reasons of having a shorter life. The less stress and pollution there is, the more peaceful and longer life will be. Therefore, people should be aware of the dangers of stress and pollution and they should take variety of measures in an attempt to escape from it.

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