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Topic # 180: Movies are popular all over the world. Explain why movies are so popular. Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

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Everybody wants to have entertainment in his life. There are lots of sources of getting entertainment like watching movies, playing with pets, listening interested music and reading comedy stories or jokes. From the all sources, everybody like to watch movies. Movies are very helpful for relieving daily stress and to make free from tiredness.

Movies often tell about cultures, histories, language and traditions of different-different countries which most of people like to enjoy with curiousness to know. Normally, people like to watch movies to get information in an animated form rather than reading. There are lots of religious cartoon animated movies which most of parents want their children to watch as part of their development and make them knowledgeable about their cultures. Movies are also best source to get command over the language. I often watch English movies to make my English better.

People often like to watch movies based on moral. People sometimes get obsessed from moral based movies. Movies change a person's life. I inspired from a hollywood movie, pursuit of hapiness. I liked the story a lot. I realized that nothing can be achieved without doing hard work. If I want to get something in my life, I have to work hard until I collapse and achieve it.

People also like to enjoy movies of skilled actors. Some people only look for movies based on a perticular theme like movies based on dance, cinematographic, good acting, reality or movies of selected actors or directors or writers. I love to watch movies based on a dance theme. I have seen whole series of hollywood movie, step up. I had a great time while watching those movies.

To sum it all up, people always want to have a break from their busy routine and movies are the best entertaining source for people to keep them energetic and enthusiastic.

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Everybody wants to have entertainment in his life. There are lots of sources of getting entertainment like watching movies, playing with pets, listening TO interestedING music and reading comedyICAL stories or jokes. APART From the all THESE sources, everybody likeS to watch movies. Movies are very helpful for relieving daily stress and to make free from tiredness.FOLLOWING ARE SOME OF THE REASONS WHY MOVIES ARE POPULAR.

Movies often tell about cultures, histories, language and traditions of different-different countries which mostLY INQUISITIVE of people like to enjoy with curiousness to know. Normally, people like to watch movies to get information in an animated form rather than reading. There are lots of religious cartoon animated movies which most of parents want their children to watch as part of their development and make them knowledgeable about their cultures. Movies are also best source to get command over the language. I often watch English movies to make my English better.

People often like to watch movies based on moral. People sometimes get obsessed from moral based movies. Movies change a person's life. I GOT inspired from a hollywood movie, Pursuit of hapiness. I liked that story a lot. I realized that nothing can be achieved without doing hard work. If I want to get something in my life, I have to work hard until I collapse and achieve it.

People also like to enjoy movies of skilled actors. Some people only look for movies based on a perticular theme like movies based on dance, cinematographic, good acting, reality or movies of selected actors or , directors or writers. I love to watch movies based on a dance theme. I have seen whole series of hollywood movie, step up. I had a great time while watching those movies.

To sum it all up, people always want to have a break from their busy routine and movies are the best entertaining source for people to keep them energetic and enthusiastic.

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