about transportation

[Chaozhuo]

Hello, please help me correct my essay :)

Topic: Now because of the improved technology in communication and transport, people in some countries can choose to live and work anywhere they want. Do you think it is good? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently, private cars are playing an increasingly important role in daily lives of people. A good many individuals think that private cars have brought us many benefits, which make our lives more convenient. As far as I am concerned, although we are the beneficial owners of the improved technology in communication and transport, it also causes some drawbacks.

It is true that the development of transport has brought the populations many benefits. To begin with, it has improved the quality of our lives. Outskirts, the favorite of contemporary people, give us a tranquil environment, which is rare in this noisy world. In addition, people are able to work more effectively if they can choose to work anywhere they want. Everyone will be enthusiastic about the work when he (she) is satisfied. Another important point is that it can reduce employment pressure, because the government needs to increase the number of staff, in particular public securities, in living areas.

However, it also leads to some phenomena we do not expect. Primarily, nature resources, such as fossil fuels, may be exhaust, because they are non-renewable. Moreover, it will pollute the environment. Outskirts that we lived were unexploited a few years ago. Now we are producing a large amount of rubbish every day. Finally, living far from cities or metropolis is inconvenient sometimes. For example, we cannot arrive to the hospital in time when there is an accident.

To conclude, although we get some benefits from the improved technology in communication and transport, it seems that the downsides exceed the upsides. Thus, we ought to ensure the rational use of private cars and other transportation.

TOEFL listening lectures: To which entertainment does the lecturer not relate Greek drama?

[Sabrinayaa]

Now because of the improved technology in communication and transport, people in some countries can choose to live and work anywhere they want. Do you think it is good? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Currently, private cars are playing an increasingly important role in daily lives of people. A good many individuals think that private cars have brought us many benefits, which make our lives more convenient. As far as I am concerned, although we are the benefiT FROMowners of the ADVANCED technology in communication and transport, it also causes some drawbacks.

It is true that the development of transportATION has brought PEOPLE (I think it's better)many benefits. To begin with, it has improved the quality of our lives. Outskirts, ONE OF the MOST favorite PLACE TO THE contemporary people, give us a tranquil environment, which ARE rare in this noisy world. In addition, people are able to work more effectively if they can choose to work anywhere they want. Everyone will be enthusiastic about the work when he (she) is satisfied. Another important point is that it can reduce employment pressure, because the government needs to increase the number of staff, in particularLY public securities, in living areas.

However, it also leads to some phenomena we do not expect. Primarily, nature resources, such as fossil fuels, may be exhaustED, because they are non-renewable. Moreover, it will pollute the environment. Outskirts that we lived were unexploited a few years ago.HOWEVER, Now we are producing a large amount of rubbish every day. Finally, living far from cities or metropolis is inconvenient sometimes. For example, we cannot arrive to the hospital in time when there is an accident.

To conclude, although we get some benefits from the improved technology in communication and transport, it seems that the downsides exceed the upsides. Thus, we ought to ensure the rational use of private cars and other transportation.

I think your ponits are great, but you also need to think out some more persuasive example.

[B.i.]

Why transportation is needed for future growth?
1) you admitted that rustic people could move to cities to learn and work. It couses a migration.
2) A town could grow into bigger city. It couses changing of a city settelment and a status.
3) Transportation for workers only. This is a good object of social to your employees :)

your sincerely
B.i.

[B.i.]

Hi Chaozhuo

how are you? Hopefully you will take your essay and do your best.
I live in Poland and we may chat a bit. What do you think about this?

What do you do?
I am a student of finances & accoutment and I am going to pass my buchellor thesis this year. My thesis is pretty: taxes in internal and external trade.

And you? how old are you?

Looking foward to hear from you,

B.I.

[Chaozhuo]

Nice to meet you! B.I

I am 22 years old. Now I am an undergraduate and this year is the last year. I am majoring in communication engineering. I want to make friend with you, too.
besides, I am intending to go abroad for a master degree. Wish you could provide me some information:)

Your sincerely
Chaozhuo

[B.i.]

Nice to meet you.
What about transportation... Actually, I put some information about internal trade into my thesis. To be honest, I have found a few information about transportation in Poland.
First of all, if I compare it with actual datas, I will find that Poland has its export and trade for over 80% by SITC statistics by producing transportation and heavy machines (http://www.stat.gov.pl/gus).

We are building in Warsaw:
1) second line of subway named Metro
2) Playgrounds due to 2012 UEFA, there is ability to buy ticets for it now
3) A few streets and flyovers

Warsaw is only 1,2 mln people (nothing to compare with cities of China!)

You may find a resolution of a good school named Politechnika Warszawska, on a web

http://www.pw.edu.pl/

happy time to spend!
B.I., age 26

[Katty2010]

Chaozhuo you have written a very good essay :)!

"A good many individuals think that private cars have brought us many benefits, which make our lives more convenient. As far as I am concerned, although we are the benefiT FROMowners of the ADVANCED technology in communication and transport, it also causes some drawbacks." Sabirinaya, there is nothing wrong with this paragraph, infact you have made the sentence incorrect by checking it. Thats my Opinion.
We do benifit from technology, hence we are benificial owners of the technology.
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