#2 (permalink) Sat Apr 16, 2011 20:05 pm Re: Some students attend universities because students studying in those universi |
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Hi, I am not an English teacher, but I would be happy to make some comments on your essay.
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"Some students attend universities because students studying in those universities get good jobs after they graduate. Other students go to universities because they have famous professors. Which one would you prefer and give reasons to support your answer".
Universities has been defined as temple{s} of education, education which subsequently coined with the opportunities of job.{this sentence doesn't make sense to me - do you mean "education joined with future job opportunities"?} [Some] Students prefer to join[attend] a university from where you[they] will get [an] ample amount of job opportunities after graduation and forget about the quality of education that is being imparted. I prefer to join[choose] a university, having[which has] famous professors and [an] excellent education[al] environment.
One reason for my support is that a high quality education makes you distinct{I think distinctive would be a better choice} and renowned. In universities students get enrolled[enroll] for specific course{s} and attain specialization in a particular area. Suitable and profound{this word doesn't really work here} education enrich[es] the student specialty enabling him to achieve significantly in any profession in future{success in any future profession}. And, here comes the role of professors{try" And this is why professors are so critical"},{colon, not comma} professors capable of imparting such discrete knowledge to make their pupils discreet{discreet is the wrong word - what are you trying to say?]. These famous professors are well known for their knowledge, specialty{specialty doesn't really work here} and research.
Moreover, famous professor help in boosting [the]ranking of a university and which also help{s} from [a] job prospective. Research conducted by professors increases the institute['s] recognition which consequently increases [the]ranking of the university. With the[a high] ranking, investment in the university increases[,] which means good[improved] infrastructure and [a] world class facility. An increased ranking will attract the attraction of people[employers] and thus students will have higher chances of job opportunity{will have better job opportunities}. So indeed the famous professor{s} help in building [the] career{s} of the students.
In conclusion, I would like to say that famous professor{s} helps in imparting sound knowledge which increases the chances of success in future{chances of future success} and thus I would prefer to join a university with famous professors.
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