Help me check this essay: Ask a famous person one question?

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When I have chance to talk with a famous person, I want to ask that person many questions which are always in my mind. However, if just one question is accepted, I desire for asking Stephen Hawking how he made his career so successful while his was suffering a serious disease. My writing will critical analyze the reasons why I choose that question and that celebrity.

In the first place, great achievement of Stephen enables my curiosity. Needless to say, Stephen is the greatest science in the 21 century. His researches significantly contribute for astronomy and help human have more clearly view about the formation of space. To gain those achievements, besides his intellect, he certainly has some skills and experiences in studying and researching which would be able to help me improve my study. His respond can include valuable lessons for me such as time management or how to read material effectively. Indeed, the information of his life and his work will create a golden chance for me to draw some lessons for myself.

Secondly, the most admirable thing of Stephen is his life attitude. The fact is that he suffered a horrible disease from he was born which take the voice and the ability to walk away from him. Nevertheless, he did not give up. Even he gains so wonder success which normal people with full mental and physical ability desire for. It is very happy for me to listen the story of his life, what he suffered, especially what is his inspiration to overcome those difficulties. He surely is an optimistic person and has remarkable energy. After talking with him, I am supposed to promote myself and realize that how lucky I am, so I need to try more to become an useful person and gain more knowledge to dedicate for the development of society. By and large, it is very beneficial for me after receive his answer for my question.

Last but not least, my personal enjoyment encourages me ask him that question. I am quite interest in astronomy, so I am very excited with the researches of Stephen. His theory about origin of space, dark holes, etc make his become my idol. How wonderful it is when I have chance to talk with my idol, listen directly the person who created impressive discoveries explain his theory. The love with astronomy absolutely is one of the most important factors for his success. Inasmuch as I have the same interest with him, I often eager to talk with him. Without doubt, hear the respond of Stephen satisfy my dream.
In short, from what discussed above, I want to ask Stephen Hawking the question about his motivation which encourages his success.

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