TOEFL® ibt writing independent task

[Mywill123]

QUESTION :
“Travelling to a different country can be both exciting and frustrating at the same time. What are the most important pieces of advice that you would give visitors coming to your country? Give reasons and details to support your response.”

Nowadays, people from many developed nations such as France and Britain would like to go on a trip to a different country. Sometimes, tourists find it either exciting or frustrating when they come to a country which they do not know much. Here is some helpful pieces of advice which can help you get accustomed to one easily.
First of all, this is the first time you have come to a new country so you may be a stranger. But do not let yourself feel lost if you can’t communicate with anyone there. To be specific, learning a little bit of language is very helpful in this circumstance. Just some common sayings such as greeting, asking for direction and communication.
Secondly, can you find out the streets or places you would like to pay a visit to? A map can help you work it out. By indicating where you are, then follow the direction of the map, you are able to manage to get the way to any streets or take a tour to famous scenes without any doubt.
Thirdly, if you are worried about accommodation, do not bother about this any more. Just make a phone call to the Customer Service in the country you are in and ask them for hotels with high security and well-served food. Of course, you have to get the phone number of service in your country in advance through your local network.
Nextly, weather in each countries, each continents is different, sometimes severe such as Africa and Serbia. Since you are a first-time one so take care of yourself. In case you get sick or feel ill, you can buy some medicine at the pharmacy or you had better go to hospital for check-up.
To sum up, travelling to another country can be a new experience for all tourists so getting some advantageous pieces of advice would help you much.Anyway, I hope, with the advice I supposed to you, you could feel at ease to pay a visit to a country you like.

thanks for advice

TOEFL listening discussions: Why did the professor ask to see the student?

[Luschen]

Hi, I am not a teacher, but as a native English speaker I think you have written a very good essay. The tone may be a little too informal, but your writing is clear for the most part: only a couple sentences which should be rewritten.

[Mywill123]

Thanks sir

[Mywill123]

Topics: Some people believe that zoos serve useful functions. Other people believe that it is cruel and wrong to confine in zoos. Tell which point of view you agree with and explain why, using specific details and reasons.

Zoos are now prevalent all over the world and there are many views on them. Some people agree that zoos are useful and multifunctional, but others dispute that capturing animals from their natural dwellings means cruelty and immorality. So, whis idea is better: acceptance or objection?
People in favor of endorsing zoos claim that they are helpful and serve many functions. They help to protect some rare animals from illegal hunting and near extinction. For instance, Red birds are in danger since they almost disappear in some places, we just find them in a small number but fortunately, they have a safer place to survive and breed. Another point is that zoos are appropriate labs for researching and studying about biology as well as ecology.
On the other hand, some dispute that concept. Animals kept away from wild life feel like a fish out of water. For instance, there are some animals die out when captured and brought up in zoos as an unrealistic forest can not share the similarities with a real one. The next point is that zoos tend to be cruel and immoral. For instance, tigers, called as king of jungle, are means of entertainment in zoos, have no resistance, no roar, look like a big cat waiting for food.
To sum up, I can not align myself totally with either concept. I have some reservation about both positions. No one can deny the multifunctions of zoos but capturing too many of them may destroy the nature of zoos. I think we should balance between real forest and unreal one because the action of doing harm to nature has its cost.

[Ahmed4444]

Nowadays travelling considers as an usual trend especially indeveloped countries, as annually in vacations many people used to travel to anther part of the world, where he can see new things. We need the people to be well prepared to make their travelling as a woderful experience, and not to make them depressed after the journy.
As i have coupls of advices to stick with.

[Beeesneees]

Hi Ahmed,

I suspect you meant something like this as an introduction:
Nowadays travelling is considered to be the norm, especially in developed countries, whereby annual vacations allow people to travel to other parts of the world and see new things. People need to be well-prepared for their travels so that it can be a wonderful experience and they are not depressed at the end of thier journey.
To that end, I have some pieces of advice for travelling.
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Cheers m' dears!

[Jurat911]

Dear coach, plese help me critique my first independent writing essay, thanks in advence !!!!

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
People holding different views cannot achieve success as a team

With the rapid development of society, there are an increasing number of people who are concerned over whether teams should be necessary for attaining success. This is which controversy arises. Some people firmly believe that teams shouldn’t be required to achieve success. But there are some people who are have different views about success that team work is the most essential factor to accomplish the ultimate purpose. Regarding success, people holds different attitude about it. As far as I am concerned, I cannot agree with the statement for the following reasons.
First of all, I am trying to put forward my opinion that teams work really is the essential element to attain success. As the rapid development of advanced technology, we are facing with more competitive works and challenges. It also reminds us to improve our social skills and overcome such difficulties. It also needs working together or cooperation with other people who have same viewpoint. It will affect all of acts of people to reach the ultimate purpose and eventually it will determine attaining the success. However, in order to have success, it also requires taking more time to do hard work and keep persistence, that’s the crucial factor for achieve success.
Additionally, this is no doubt that cooperation each other might be solve more complex issues. Take our research team for example, since we are getting involved the project called “research on marketplace investigation”, we are try to find out some practical solutions to solve the problems in current marketplace. Although we are many times attempt to collect some social experimental report, but it’s so difficult for us to continue our research. We are aware of the importance of cooperation and it is the only way to solve problems. We always can say that cooperation is power.
From what have been discussed above that we can safely come to conclusion that we want to success, then it should be required collaboration and takes more time to do hard work. As we heard about remarkable success in scientific world, it’s also results of working together and cooperation. However, cooperative work is decisive factor to achieve success.

[Tyyna]

QUESTION :

Luchen wrote:
{try to make the thesis statement be able to stand on its own}

Can you explain it in ditails?

[Jurat911]

Dear coach, plese help me critique my first independent writing essay, thanks in advence !!!!

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
People holding different views cannot achieve success as a team

With the rapid development of society, there are an increasing number of people who are concerned over whether teams should be necessary for attaining success. This is which controversy arises. Some people firmly believe that teams shouldn’t be required to achieve success. But there are some people who are have different views about success that team work is the most essential factor to accomplish the ultimate purpose. Regarding success, people holds different attitude about it. As far as I am concerned, I cannot agree with the statement for the following reasons.
First of all, I am trying to put forward my opinion that teams work really is the essential element to attain success. As the rapid development of advanced technology, we are facing with more competitive works and challenges. It also reminds us to improve our social skills and overcome such difficulties. It also needs working together or cooperation with other people who have same viewpoint. It will affect all of acts of people to reach the ultimate purpose and eventually it will determine attaining the success. However, in order to have success, it also requires taking more time to do hard work and keep persistence, that’s the crucial factor for achieve success.
Additionally, this is no doubt that cooperation each other might be solve more complex issues. Take our research team for example, since we are getting involved the project called “research on marketplace investigation”, we are try to find out some practical solutions to solve the problems in current marketplace. Although we are many times attempt to collect some social experimental report, but it’s so difficult for us to continue our research. We are aware of the importance of cooperation and it is the only way to solve problems. We always can say that cooperation is power.
From what have been discussed above that we can safely come to conclusion that we want to success, then it should be required collaboration and takes more time to do hard work. As we heard about remarkable success in scientific world, it’s also results of working together and cooperation. However, cooperative work is decisive factor to achieve success

[Tyyna]

Hi Luchen,
you should go to Preparation for and help with the TOEFL® Test and essay samples collection and post your essay as a new topic.