Should IVF be free for everyone who wants it?

[Kjh0212]

Hello everyone,

Today, I wrote a mini-essay about IVF and I would like to know if I made any mistake(s).

Could you please read my mini-essay and tell me if there's any mistake?

Oh, and by the way, it's not completely finished.

Thank you very much : )

*IVF = In vitro fertilisation *

Should IVF be free for everyone who wants it?

Some people claim that IVF should be free for everyone whereas some say that it must not be free. In my opinion, IVF should be free for everyone who wants it because some couples in the world, are incapable of making babies and it’s not their fault that they can’t reproduce. In addition to that, a lot of people can’t afford it because of its high price. Those people are desperate to have kids on their own and I think it would be unfair if IVF cost a lot of money because you can’t do anything about being infertile. No one chooses to be infertile. Therefore, the government should let them have it for free no matter what situation they are in.

Some people disagree with the idea of letting people have IVF for free because it’s too expensive to make one and they think the money should be used to help people who have cancer instead. However, those people, who are suffering from cancer, will still die within 3 months (even with our help). Even if the money, that was supposed to be used to make IVF, was used to help people with cancer, they would still have a limited amount of time to live. So, it’s better to have babies than to have people with cancer who will die in the near future. Scientists should make more IVFs and as mentioned before, it should be free for everyone who desperately wants a child.

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