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The question of achieving success by planning carefully or taking risks or chances have been debated in my scoiety .To be honest, I believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances because of the following reasons I assert.

First of all , some people think that careful planning result in success because they assume that will draw precise steps for their roads,but I oppose them because if you encourage yourself to take risks or chances that face you in life ,this will give you more experince to deal with the difficulties or obstacles that might be in the future.In addition , as old saying goes”failure teach success”.So, we learn from our mistakes in order to avoid them in our journey for accomplishing our goals.

Furthermore,taking risks or a lot of chances motivate you to be more brave for the following steps to resist all the unexpectable dilemmas that meet you later.As a conquence, that make you more indurable , patient,and srong –willed to watch your faults and evaluate your progress.Also, taking risks is kind of enjoyment and joy because you challenge yourself to attain what others think is impossible.To be frank, the great pride and excitement in life is doing what others think is impossible and that is the terrific success.

To sum up, from what I have discussed before it is my point of view to take risks or more chances to reach the success you plan and dream for your life in this world .

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two students in a chemistry class

[Katty2010]

The question of achieving success by planning carefully or taking risks or chances have been debated in my scoiety .To be honest, I believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances because of the following reasons I assert.

First of all , some people think that careful planning result in success because they assume that will draw precise steps for their JOURNEY AHEAD. roads,but I oppose them because if you encourage yourself to take risks or chances that YOU WILL face you in life ,this will give you more experince to deal with the difficulties or obstacles that might FACE be in the future.(VERY LONG SENTENCE!) In addition , as old saying goes”failure teachES success”.So HENCE, we learn from our mistakes. in order to avoid them in our journey for accomplishing our goals.

Furthermore,taking risks or a lot of chances motivate you to be more brave for the following steps to resist all the unexpectable dilemmas that meet you later. As a conSEquence, that makeS you more indurable , patient,and srong –willed to watch your faults and evaluate your progress. Also, taking risks is kind of AN enjoyment and joy because you challenge yourself to attain what others think is impossible.To be frank, the great pride and excitement in life is doing what others think is impossible and that is the terrific success.

To sum up, from what I have discussed before it is my point of view to take risks or more chances to reach the success you plan and dream for your life in this world .
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