In many countries crime is increasing. What are the main reasons for this?

[Katehell]

In many countries crime is increasing. What are the main reasons for this? What can be done to improve the situation? Support your position with relevant examples and include your own experience. (250 word)

Nowadays, crime is expanding in lot of countries all over the world. I think that the main reason is the unemployment growing, while the cost of living is rising. People committee a crime for their living, but I believe that, this is not a good reason for all the time. Much people don’t work, because they don’t want to work, just sit home and wait for the monthly support. To decrease the crime, the government should manage the level of unemployment, control the unemployment benefits and reduce the crime.

First of all, increasing the number of workplaces by building new factories and other commercial facilities is a good way to rising the people well-being and the result will be the drop of the crime. However, new job opportunities need strong, growing economy, where people find jobs and they don’t afraid to lose it. The lack of the strong economy is one of the main reason for crime.

In the other hand, the government has to convince the people that working is more beneficial than sitting home and stealing from the neighborhood by give them less supports and stricter punishment for crime. In my experience, many families in the countryside don’t grow any crops such as vegetables and fruit, in spite of most of them has garden and time for that and they get seeds for free, too. They rather steal it from another garden, what is easier and usually they don’t caught by the police. This adverse behavior has to punished and prevent by the authorities.

All things considered, the strong economy is one of the key for the lower crime rate, but the weak authority is also very important. Develop a country’s economy is a very hard and long procedure, and needed international support.

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[Katty2010]

Nowadays, crime is expanding in lot of countries all over the world. I think that the main reason is the GROWING unemployment growing, while the cost of living is rising. People committee a crime for their living, but I believe that, this is not a good reason for all the time. Much people don’t work, because they don’t want to work, just sit AT home and wait for the monthly support. To decrease the crime, the government should manage the level of unemployment, control the unemployment benefits and reduce the crime.

First of all, increasing the number of workplaces by building new factories and other commercial facilities is a good way to risE the people well-being OF PEOPLE and thAT WILL result IN DROPPING OF CRIME RATE. will be the drop of the crime. However, new job opportunities need strong, growing economy, where people find jobs and they ARE NOT don’t afraid to lose it. The lack of the strong economy is one of the main reason for crime.

On the other hand, the government has to convince the people that working is more beneficial than sitting AT home and stealing from the neighborhood by give them less supports and stricter punishment for crime. ACCORDING TO my experience, many families in the countryside don’t grow any crops such as vegetables and fruit, EVENTHOUGH [s]in spite of[/s] most of them has garden and time for that and they get seeds for free, too. They rather steal it from another'S garden, what is easier and usually they don’t GET caught by the police. This adverse behavior has to BE punished and preventED by the authorities.

All things considered, the strong economy is one of the key for the lower crime rate, but the weak authority is also very important. DevelopING a country’s economy is a very hard and long procedure, and needS international support.

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