Some people believe that it is important to make large amounts of money...

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Some people believe that it is important to make large amounts of money,while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand.
In today's world many people are tempted by money and want to achieve more and more, while others do not take the step of seeking material things and just live comfortably with a sum that allows them to live well - not wealthy at all but not poorly as well.
Firstly, we all live in ages when money plays a significant role in our daily life. But is it really important to have great deals of it ? Some people think so. They believe that money can buy them everything they want. That's why they are enticed to earn more and more. I can not despite the fact that in many aspects money is equivalent to success and fame. In addition, it can provide you with life full of everything when it comes to material. But isn't it too luxurious to have state-of-the art cars, a couple of yachts, enormous mansions and other things that we can all live without? Think about that there are so many starving people around the world while you are embraced with many expensive objects that you actually don't need. Now, do you think it is essential to have a surplus of money?
Secondly, there are people who are grateful with what they have and live happily with what they earn They are realistic and do not afford themselves to dream about huge amounts of money because they know it's impossible for them to achieve this and they still live good But aren't we supposed to develop ourselves? We have to set goals which challenge us and when we achieve them to make new ones. Ambitious not always means greedy and sometimes isn't it better to want more because that is the way you can refine yourself.
To sum up, I don't think that it is crutial to earn large amounts of money just to have it, but it's essential to use them right and fair. Also, having more than enough is unnecessarily.

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