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[Rafaelcp]

Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources, such as forests, animals, or clean water. Choose one resource that is disappearing and explain why it needs to be saved. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

The war between humanity and nature is bad as it has never been before. A lot of natural life is giving up and don’t seem to be able to resist any longer. We are living in an age that humans seem to be finally taking over all of what is left in our planet.

We have seen innumerous races of animals to disappear completely from our environment, it’s no longer news that our water resources are going empty and a green scenario is not a usual part of our life anymore. As every natural thing is important to keep our planet balanced, water may be the one in the most seriously danger right now.

We can look at some parts of the planet that people have been trying to survive without much water for a long time and it’s devastating. It’s living proof right in front of us that water is vital for any living creature and especially for humans. It is one element which the whole world shares together and everyone and everything depends on it to keep breathing.

Even though everyone is aware of the world’s problem about clean water, people keep damaging it in the most different ways. There are trash being thrown on rivers, oil being dumped in the ocean and people just simply wasting a lot of it.

Nature has not only asking for help but it’s has been warning the world that humans need to stop hurting their planet. Different parts of the world have been surprised by the consequences of it such as huge hurricanes and floods. I believe it’s nature’s way of telling us that the relationship between humanity and our planet needs to be mutual and in exchange and not only take from it.

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[Rafaelcp]

no one?? i just need opinions...

[Katty2010]

The war between humanity and nature is AS bad as it has never been before. A lot of natural life is giving up and don’t seem to be able to resist any longer. We are living in an age that humans seem to be finally taking over all of what is left On our planet.

We have seen innumerous races of animals to disappear completely from our environment, it’s no longer news that our water resources are going empty and a green scenario is not a usual part of our life anymore. As every natural thing is important to keep our planet balanced, water may be the one in the most seriously danger right now.

We can look at some parts of the planet that people have been trying to survive without much water for a long time and it’s devastating. It’s living proof right in front of us that water is vital for any living creature and especially for humans. It is one element which the whole world shares together and everyone and everything depends on it to keep breathing.

Even though everyone is aware of the world’s problem about clean water, people keep damaging it in the most different ways. There IS trash being thrown In rivers, oil being dumped in the oceanS and people just simply wasting a lot of it.

Nature IS not only asking for help but it’s has been warning the world that humans need to stop hurting their planet. Different parts of the world have been surprised by the consequences of it such as huge hurricanes and floods. I believe it’s nature’s way of telling us that the relationship between humanity and our planet needs to be mutual and in exchange and not only take from it.

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[Rafaelcp]

thank you so much!!