Compare yourself today and yourself 5 years ago.

[Ahmadi2010]

Compare yourself today and yourself 5 years ago. In what ways are you the same or different? Use specific examples to support your response.

Time is unstoppable; whether we like it or not it may affect us. This question made me to think about the changes which happened in my life during the 5 years. I became stronger, but I still have the same respect toward my parents. I am independent financially and I can make decisions alone.
Five years ago I was 22 years old and just finished the 6th term at the university, without any job experience. In March 2006 I started a part time job on a 6 months contract and this was a wonderful opportunity for me because I got some valuable experience and know how to be a positive member of a group. After graduating from the university I could find a full time job on the famous company that helped me to imply the lessons I learned both at the university and from my last career.
Comparing myself with 5 years ago, I think that I still have the same religious attitude because I pray with the method that I implied 5 years ago. I love my relatives and specially my parents without any limitation as 5 years ago. I am still so friendly and helpful to the people who are close to me.For example, last weak my nephew asked me a help on his lessons and I have done this without any hesitation.
I came to the conclusion that in some cases such as my career experience and studies, I changed and made progress during over years. In the other hand, I am still the same person in my personal activities, attitudes and have the same ideas toward the life.

Could someone grade or correct this essay please?

TOEFL listening lectures: Why are red crosses erected on Tanna Island?

[Katty2010]

Time is unstoppable; whether we like it or not it may affect us. This question made me to think about the changes which happened in my life during the LAST 5 years. I became stronger, but I still have the same respect toward my parents. I am independent financially and I can make decisions alone.

Five years ago I was 22 years old and just finished the 6th term at the university, without any job experience. In March 2006 I started a part time job on a 6 months contract and this was a wonderful opportunity for me because I got some valuable experience and know how to be a positive member of a group. After graduating from the university I FOUND could find a full time job In the famous company that helped me to imply the lessons I learned both at the university and from my last career.

Comparing myself with 5 years ago, I think that I still have the same religious attitude because I pray with the method that I implied 5 years ago. I love my relatives and specially my parents without any limitation as 5 years ago. I am still so friendly and helpful to the people who are close to me.For example, last weak my nephew asked me TO help WITH his lessons and I have done this without any hesitation.

I HAVE came to the conclusion that in some cases such as my career experience and studies, I HAVE changed and made progress during PAST FIVE years. On the other hand, I am still the same person in my personal activities, attitudes and have the same ideas toward the life.

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Nice essay. Got to work on sentence structure. Read as much as you can. This essay seems short. For toefl you need to write 350 words. Try working on that within time limit of 20 minutes. Also tenses and other grammar practices will help you. Goodluck! :) 7.5/10
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[Ahmadi2010]

Thanks dear Katty2010:)

[Apple0]

You did a good job. However, in your last sentence of third paragraph, "last weak my nephew asked me to help with his lessons and I have done this without any hesitation", I think it should be like this, "last week my nephew asked me to help with his lessons and I did it(or I had done it) without any hesitation".
What do you think?