please assess my essay. I need your help. Thanks so much :)

[Bokehaholic]

Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Traveling is a favorite activity of most people. When we go to different places, we will have chance to broaden our mind as well as get rid of the great pressure of studying or working. While some people choose to travel alone, others prefer to invite some of their acquaintances to go with them. Personally, if I have a chance to travel, I will ask one of my close friends to go with me instead of going alone. I believe that her/his appearance will make my trip more memorable and interesting.

To begin with, besides the happiness, traveling sometimes is full of troubles. If we travel without anybody else, we have to solve these problems ourselves, which is probably complicated and even terrifying. With a friend beside, we can overcome the difficulty much easier. For example, while going back to the hotel at night, we may get lost and do not have a map with us. The more we try to find the path, the more we feel scared. However, if there is some one besides, he/she will encourage us and find the way together with us. As a result, we feel everything is safer and easier. What is more, a friend can help us effectively in some urgent situations such as having an accident or broken legs or arms, etc. Therefore, going with some one else instead of being alone can be very useful in some problematic situations we may encounter.

Furthermore, we can share multiple things with our companion when traveling. I do not deny that going by ourselves is more independent and free, yet I think that it is sometimes boring and morose. Instead, if we go with another person, we can experience copious fascinating and interesting things together such as taking photographs, swimming at the sea, admiring the sunset or sunrise, etc. Also, during our trips, we can talk to each other and thus, we do not feel lonely when being in a crowd. Therefore, with the present of another person , our journey is much more memorable and interesting.

All in all, I think traveling with another one will be happier and safer than going alone. We can help with each other whenever being in troubles at new places, sharing happy things and together going through new things that we have never had in our lives.

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[Cristina.ro]

[Bokehaholic]

Thanks so much for your correction. Could you please rate this essay for me ???
How much points do you think I will get ?

[Cristina.ro]

Bokehaholic, I am not a teacher and I honestly don't know how many points you could get for your essay so I would rather not grade it if you don't mind. Besides, grading essays can be such a subjective thing, don't you think? Anyway, I'd say you are definitely on the right track. Keep up the good work! :)
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[Bokehaholic]

Actually, I just want to know the approximate point so I can set a higher goal to achieve.
But you told me that I was on the right track, so I''ll keep practicing more :)

Thanks Cristina a lot !!!! :)