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[Waghma]

Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When we visit to a place the most interesting and fascinating place is museum. The museums reflects the custom, culture, tradition, history, the country’s wars, and people of that particular place, so the best and the most fascinating place in a country is museum. It’s impossible to know about the people of a place without visiting museums. I will explain this phenomenon by providing some of the conspicuous reasons about the topic.

First, different places have different history, the best and convenient way to know about it, is visiting the museum. Someone can attain vast information about history. There are swords, picture of the heroes of that place, the colorful uniforms and all the collection which used during the war. The description and the background knowledge can inform us better about the history. The museum related to the history of a country is necessary to visit to know about the past of that country.

Secondly, the other most important factor to visit a museum is to watching something rarely unique. The beautiful collection and amazing discoveries of a country can attract the tourist a lot. The museums can define the culture of that place too. Sitting in a seat after exhausting travel to watch performance which represents the local culture of the country, will provide unique pleasure to the tourist.

Furthermore, museums have great contribution to enrich our knowledge about various sides. In every country the museums about different issues have been established, such as calamities, diseases, history, and photography so on. The information and the knowledge which obtain from the museum are never last. It preserves in our mind and will be with us like precious treasure throughout our lives. When I was in school, we had a trip to the famous museum of Pakistan. It was Menjo daro, one of the old cities located in sindh province. That was quite an amazing experience. The way our teacher defined and informed us about the statues and the rich history of that remarkable city is still fresh in my mind.

At last, the museums are like the bridge between the tourist and the place. In order for better understanding and to know about the people, the tourist should past this bridge at first place. That is the reason people are always eager to visit the museums, when they travel to the new place.

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[Justin_Huang]

Hi,
I like your essay. But it seems that this sentence is too arbitrary. Do you agree?