Young people enjoy life more than older people do

[Hqt1989]

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Young people enjoy life more than older people do
As the time goes by, social has changed more and more rapid. Through this changing, compared with old people, young people are likely to adapt to modern life quicker, so that, from my common sense, I agree with the statement that young people enjoy life more than older people do.
In the first place, most young people have more energy as well as vigor to get benefits from life, thus enjoying their life more. Young people have more energy and time to do what they want and go to many exciting places. For example, young people could travel to remote land to view the charming landscapes, not afraid of being illness or health problems like older people.
In the second place, young people always seek new ways to satisfy their life. Young people have less life experience than old people, therefore they are not hesitate to refresh their daylife activites. In fact, because of undergoing so many experiences, old individual get bored with new activities. On the other hand, old people would like to spend time in safe way such as doing house chores, gardening or playing with pets. On the contrary, young people like doing sport, taking part in party with their friends.
Furthermore, the youth are more flexible to get acquainted with new device in compared with the older. When a new product appears, young people would like to learn how to use it quickly and they gain interesting feeling from doing this. For instance, when mobile phone first appears, young people get more advantages by using it. Old people are likely to use telephone because telephone is less functions and easier to handle than mobile phone.
In conclusion, I am the opinion of that young people enjoy life more than old people. They are both physically and mentally tending towards the life enjoying activities.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university science lecture on Island Biogeography

[Katty2010]

As the time goes by, social LIFE has changed more and more rapidILY. Through this changing, compared with old people, young people are likely to adapt to modern life quicker. [s] so that, from my common sense,[/s] I agree with the statement that young people enjoy life more than older people do.

In the first place, most young people have more energy as well as vigor to get benefits from life, thus enjoying their life more. Young people have more energy and time to do what they want and go to many exciting places. For example, young people cAN travel to remote land to view the charming landscapes, not afraid of GETTING ILL or SUFFERING FROM health problems like older people.

In the second place, young people always seek new ways to satisfy their life. Young people have less life experience than oldER people, therefore they DO not hesitate to refresh their daylife activites. In fact, because of undergoing so many experiences, old individual get bored with new activities. On the other hand, old people would like to spend time in safe way such as doing house chores, gardening or playing with pets. On the contrary, young people like PLAYING sportS, taking part in AND partyING with their friends.

Furthermore, the youth are more flexible to get acquainted with new device in comparSION with the older FOLKS. When a new TECHNOLOGY product appears, young people would like to learn how to use it quickly and they gain interesting feeling from doing this. For instance, when mobile phone first appearED, young people gOt more advantages by using it. Old people are likely to use OLD telephoneS because tHEY HAVE is less functions and ARE easier to handle than mobile phoneS.

In conclusion, I am the IN MY opinion of that young people enjoy life more than oldER people DO. They are both physically and mentally tending towards the life enjoying activities.

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