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topic: children should do housework?
in the first place , what I put in my priority is health development. The fact is that doing housework will help children keep fit. When they clean the floor , cook, wash the clothes . This will fire driectly lipits in body, intensify strengthen of muscles and avoid many disease. More interestingly, housework make them more comfortable . They musn't think about the excercises and brain storm. They can listen to the music while working. Indeed, housework will improve their health.

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