TOEFL® WRITING PART - PLEASE REVIEW ESSAY

[Celo]

HI!!!! THE WRITING PART IT´S MY WEAKNESS. PLEASE IF YOU CAN REVIEW MY ESSAY . I HAVE A LOT OF PROBLEM WITH " , ". EVERY OPINION IS WELL RECIVE

(ANOTHER) I´M SORRY TO BUDER YOU SO MUCH. I´M PRACTICING A LOT. I´M VERY NERVOUS

You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

Despite of our born country we always have de need to meet the world, to get in touch with other civilization, to meet new people, to learn about other traditions and have different experience trough our journey even more when we are younger.

In my personal opinion I would like to visit Europe most of all my family country, Italy. I would like to get in touch with my roots as well as to visit all the beautiful and history places. Met Sienna were my mother had born, visit the Coliseums in Rome, walk though the little streets and enjoy the guilty pleasure of eating the best food that I can taste and if money is not a problem a would love to have the trip of my life, staying at the best hotel with a wonderful view of the Pisa Tower.

To sum up, I think that every person needs to have a great experience traveling and Europe most of all Italy are great for live a magic experience.

TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture by a professor of Sociobiology

[Katty2010]

Celo atleast write upto 300 words. Read as much as you can to improve your writing. There is no other option than reading! I will check your essay for sure.
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[Shinju15]

Hi Katty please my user name is SHINJU15 will you please review my essay, I think you suggestions are really good.

I present the TOEFL the 22 and I am to nerveous.

Thank