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[MaQa]

You are planning to study abroad. What do you think you will like and dislike about this experience. Why?

To study abroad for the students from countries like my motherland is an efficient event in their life. Sadly, not all students have this occasion. I also relate to the group of the students who want to continue their education abroad. Taking education abroad, of course, in the developed countries, I will derive many advantages, which will distinguish me from the other youth’s of my nation. Below I am going to shed light on reasons I gave.
First and foremost, the education in the foreign countries is different from my countries educational system in a good sense. So, the foreign universities give me chance to gain knowledge with high quality. Taking into consideration that the quality of the education in my country is not satisfactory, studying abroad I am able to derive opportunity to be high educational person for my country. Moreover, this advantage enables me to make obligatory alterations for my nation. As a result, I am able to be one of the permanent people for my country.
Another quality of studying abroad that I like is an opportunity to know lots of new people from the different countries. The study abroad is a top-hole efficient way to meet many new people with distinct traits. I can discuss some problems with them and obtain from them lots of information that influence me certainly in a good sense. Thanks to it, can make me more sociable, which I am sure that, will be compulsory experience for my future life
Finally, I have chance to stay in the developed country where I study and find appropriate job for me. While I have accommodated to the condition in my country, it can disable my career to come back to my country. Evidently, the situation for durable future career is better in the developed country. On the other hand, there is not any equal condition for specialists from particular sides of science to find job. However, I am able to find suitable job for my knowledge, with the high salary just owing to study in these countries.
In conclusion, the study abroad gives a lot of opportunities such as gain education with high quality, to find eligible job with high salary and to meet lots of people in order to be sociable. With this in mind, in comparison with sides that I dislike, the areas, which I like, is more significant.

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[MaQa]

I just need opinions. Can somebody correct my essay? PLEASE.

[Katty2010]

To study abroad for the students from countries like my motherland is an incredible opportunity in their life. Sadly, not all students have this opprotunity. I also relate to the group of the students who want to continue their education abroad. Taking education abroad, of course, in the developed countries, I will derive many advantages, which will distinguish me from the other youth’s of my nation. Below I am going to shed light on reasons I gave.

First and foremost, the education in the foreign countries is different from my countries educational system in a good sense. So, the foreign universities WILL give me A chance to gain knowledge OF high quality. Taking into consideration that the quality of the education in my country is not satisfactory, BY studying abroad I WOULD BE able to derive opportunity to be A high educatED person for my country. Moreover, this advantage enables me to make obligatory alterations for my nation. As a result, THIS OPPORTUNITY WOULD ENable ME to be one of the pROMInent people OF my country.

Another quality of studying abroad that I like is an opportunity to know lots of new people from the different countries. The study abroad is a top-Whole efficient way to meet many new people with distinct traits. I can discuss some problems with them and obtain from them lots of information that influence me certainly in a good sense. Thanks to it, IT can make me more sociable, which I am sure that, will be compulsory experience for my future life

Finally, I have chance to stay in the developed country where I study and find appropriate job for me. While I have accommodated to the condition in my country, it can disable my career to come back to my country. Evidently, the situation for durable future career is better in the developed country. On the other hand, there is not any equal condition for specialists from particular sides of science to find job. However, I am able to find suitable job for my knowledge, with the high salary just owing to study in these countries.

In conclusion, the study abroad gives a lot of opportunities such as HIGH QUALITY education with high quality, to find eligible job with high salary and to meet lots of people in order to be sociable. With this in mind, in comparison with sides that I dislike, the areas, which I like, is more significant.

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