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[Jessie_Ye]

Some people think that students should attend university for further education.Some others clasim that students should go to university to learn skills such as fixing cars or construction. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Different choice would lead to the difference of future. Nowadays, there is a controversial topic that which kinds of schools students should attend to. Massive public deem that the task of students is seeking higher education level rather than studying skills. Personally, I cannot totally underpin the both of view.

From parents and teachers perspective, the aim of attending universities is to run after the advanced level of education as most of people, especially Chinese, insist that to obtain a high degree is indeed honorable, no matter in families or society. In China, a good degree represents that you would get a piece of high salary work, at least lofty social position. Thus, in this case, numerous parents taught their children, from the period of childhood, should be a person who is acquiring knowledge in order to exceed others and to attend high-quality universities.

However, in others’ mind, the purpose of studying in universities is learning skills, such as repairing cars or construction as not all of people are either adept in acquiring theoretical knowledge or good at accurate numeration. In addition, various talents are needed by society. If flooding of the personnel academically in each field, the practical work would not be carried out. There would not have a lot of technical talents, as well as, exist in every country.

Personally, each one holds diverse strength and weaknesses, as a result of that, people cannot take the same way to weight different skilled students. Furthermore, a person who got the highest degree is not equal to be a successful one and vice versa. Thus, regardless of what the result of the public talk about, students will decide their purpose depending on hobbies or specialty themselves.

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of Natural History