Please correct my essay: One entertainer/athlete you want to meet

[SakShou]

What famous entertainer or athlete that you would like to meet?

Athletes have always been admired for their unshakable determination toward their goal and all the impressive achievements they acquired. Many people consider some athlete their ideal person, and so do I. This athlete is the one that I always wish to meet in person someday. He is Lance Armstrong.

First of all, Lance Armstrong is a great cyclist that even set a record of winning seven consecutive times in the Tour de France, one of the Grand Tours and also the most famous bicycle racing race in the world. While many professional racers desire to take the first place of the tour just one time and some others just simply want to have a chance to take part in the game, Armstrong won it seven times, uninterrupted by anyone. His success in the early 2000s made his name spread all over the world thus he became the most famous road racing cyclist of the time. All of this was a result of his great diligence in training, his burning passion for cycling and his own talent since no one can ever possibly hold the position of the champion in a game for seven consecutive years with just his talent and luck alone.

Secondly, Lance Armstrong is a great man who has overcome his own illness. Nowadays, a cancer is still considered a death penalty to any unlucky patients and yet he managed to survive after suffering one. His unbelievable strong will to live and to continue his career as a professional cyclist helped him, not only to live on but to be a bicycle racer again also. It is already a miracle for somebody to overcome a serious disease, such as a cancer but in Armstrong’s case, I think just a miracle is not even enough. At the time, the news of an athlete who once a patient survived a cancer won the championship of Tour de France for several years caught my attention and made me curious about him. To a childish me, he was like an unordinary man who possessed some supernatural power. Today, since I have grown up and finally understood that there were no such things as a mere luck or a supernatural power, I have come to admire him for everything he had gone through and all the glories he had acquired. The fact that his heydays began after he overcame the disease makes me acknowledge the power of a human’s will and what a man can do if he always does his best and never gives up. In addition, his success also encourages all the patients who suffering cancer and various serious illnesses in the world to live on and to hope for a better life.

In conclusion, if I am ever given the chance to meet up a famous person, I would like to meet Lance Armstrong. Maybe he is not the greatest cyclist in the history, and he is not the only one person who can survive a cancer in the world but there is unlikely to appear a second man like Armstrong who overcame his illness and become the greatest cyclist, unrivalled to anyone of his time./.
---------------------------------------

Thanks in advance *bow*

TOEFL listening lectures: How did Queen Elizabeth acknowledge the English victory?

[Katty2010]

Athletes have always been admired for their unshakable determination toward their goal and all the impressive achievements they acquired. Many people consider some OR THE OTHER athlete their ideal person, and so do I. This athlete is the one that I always wish to meet in person someday. He is Lance Armstrong.

First of all, Lance Armstrong is a great cyclist that even set a record of winning seven consecutive times in the Tour de France, one of the Grand Tours and also the most famous bicycle racing race in the world. While many professional racers desire to take the first place of the tour just one time and some others just simply want to have a chance to take part in the game, Armstrong won it seven times, uninterrupted by anyone. His success in the early 2000s made his name spread all over the world thus he became the most famous road racing cyclist of the time. All of this was a result of his great diligence in training, his burning passion for cycling and his own talent since no one can ever possibly hold the position of the champion in a game for seven consecutive years with just his talent and luck alone.

Secondly, Lance Armstrong is a great man who has overcome his own illness. Nowadays, a cancer is still considered a death penalty to any unlucky patient and yet he managed to survive after suffering one. His unbelievable strong will to live and to continue his career as a professional cyclist helped him, not only to live on but to be a bicycle racer again also. It is already a miracle for somebody to overcome a serious disease, such as a cancer but in Armstrong’s case, I think just a miracle is not even enough. At the time, the news of an athlete who once a patient survived a cancer won the championship of Tour de France for several years caught my attention and made me curious about him. To a childish me, he was like an unordinary man who possessed some supernatural power. Today, since I have grown up and finally understood that there were no such things as a mere luck or a supernatural power, I have come to admire him for everything he had gone through and all the glories he had acquired. The fact that his heydays began after he overcame the disease makes me acknowledge the power of a human’s will and what a man can do if he always does his best and never gives up. In addition, his success also encourages all the patients who ARE suffering FROM cancer and various serious illnesses in the world to live on and to hope for a better life.

In conclusion, if I am ever given the chance to meet up a famous person, I would like to meet Lance Armstrong. Maybe he is not the greatest cyclist in the history, and he is not the only one person who can survive a cancer in the world but there is unlikely to appear a second man like Armstrong who overcame his illness and become the greatest cyclist, unrivalled to anyone of his time./.
---------------------------------------

9/10 Awesome essay!
_________________
Just a confused kid... trying to live through twists & turns of life!
------
Everything Is Temporary!