please currect my essay thx

[Phoene Jiang]

why do yiu think people attend college or university ?
Recently, attending to college is a normal thing for every student. Due to this reason there have more universities and more easy to enter to college. What the different reasons that people attend to college. For me, I have some individual view points.

College is the professional territory which skill you choose. For instance me, I am major violin. When I in high school, there had other territory subject to study. But when I choose to enter music department I don’t spent any time in that, I just need practice my instrument every day, that really increase my skill.

In modern life degree is a necessary thing for finding job. Compare with my job hunting competitor in the future. In my background which do the boss first to see. Degree almost in Taiwan . Just what I said before. University is a place for professional skill . I have ability to attending college that almost mean I have enough quality to for my skill. That can be said that “degree” is same as to prove my basic ability.

Most important is entering college can broaden my eyes horizon. College is just like a small society. Diverse of people who come from different countries ,families , races etc. There have abundant of customs let me to company with. During this time , I can learn how to stay with them , use what speaking skill that I can’t offend them. That is a good experience for my future.

All of that are my reason why I attend to college. Because of those reasons . It let me more interesting and more fun in college .

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of Comparative Religion

[Justin_Huang]

[Katty2010]

Recently, Attending to college is a normal thing for every student. Due to this reason there ARE MANY have more universities and IT HAS ENABLED STUDENTS TO ENROLL IN COLLEGES MORE EASILY more easy to enter to college. THERE ARE MANY VALID REASONS FOR ATTENDING COLLEGES, SOME WHICH I HAVE LISTED BELOW. What the different reasons that people attend to college. For me, I have some individual view points.

College is A professional territory WHERE YOU ENHANCE THE SKILLS OF YOUR INTERESTS. which skill you choose. For instance me, I am ATTAINING A major IN violin LESSONS. When I WAS in high school, I HAD MANY DIFFERENT SUBJECTS TO STUDY there had other territory subject to study. But when I choose to enter music department AT A COLLEGE I ONLY GOT TO don’t spent any time in that, I just need practice my instrument every day, that really increaseED my skill.

In modern life degree is a necessary thing for finding job. Compare with my job hunting competitor in the future. In my background which do the boss first to see. Degree almost in Taiwan . Just what I said before. University is a place for professional skill . I have ability to attending college that almost mean I have enough quality to for my skill. That can be said that “degree” is same as to prove my basic ability.

Most important is entering college can broaden my eyes horizon. College is just like a small society. Diverse of people who come from different countries ,families , races etc. There have abundant of customs let me to company with. During this time , I can learn how to stay with them , use what speaking skill that I can’t offend them. That is a good experience for my future.

All of that are my reason why I attend to college. Because of those reasons . It let me more interesting and more fun in college .

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HEY HEY! You just called your self a MAJOR VIOLIN. You are a human, not an instrument. YOU NEED TO READ! AS MUCH AS POSSIBLE. Its really difficult to check your essay. You need to improve sentence structure and vocablury. Use a dictionary and please please please READ!!!
2/10 Poor Essay :(
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[Cristina.ro]

Hi guys, a mistake that caught my eye more than the others. ;-)