Please correct my essay: Are childhood years most important?

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Are childhood years most important in one’s life?

There are four major periods of time in the life of a normal man: the childhood, the adolescence, the adulthood and the old age. Each of them has its own impact on one’s life so it is not easy to judge which one is most important. Some people have an impression that the childhood time is the most significant period of the four since it is the beginning of a human’s life. However, from my perspective, it is not childhood years that are most important in our life but the adolescent years are.

Firstly, on the psychological ground, while children can only learn some simple and primitive feelings such as love and hate during their childhood time, adolescence has them acknowledged many other essential emotions like pride, sympathy, desire, even frustration and jealousy and so on. From those experiences, a child grows up mentally and builds his own personality which is, without a doubt, one of the most important factors that decide whether a person could be successful in life or not. Further more, from this time onward, a teenager has to learn to deal with emotions, relationships or pressure and try to adapt to the society he lives in as other people start to recognize him as an independent individual, not as a child anymore. Besides, this is also the time that a person has to make many important decisions which can be considered turning points of his life, such as which career he should take.

Secondly, on the physical ground, even though a man’s height grows up in the fattest way during his childhood years, it is in the adolescence time that his body undertakes crucial changes. Those changes have a large influence on a person physically as his or her body develops rapidly in just two or three years and gets ready for marriage and having children. In addition, adolescence is a significant time for a person to improve his overall health. A teenager who had a bad health during his childhood can make his health better with a suitable diet and regular physical exercises. On the other hand, if a man has a bad lifestyle in this crucial time, his health will take the damage and result in a weak body in his adulthood despite the fact that he was one time a healthy child.

In conclusion, while a child explores the world in a naïve way and grows up in his family’s protection during childhood years, as he turns into a teenager, he has to confront many issues by himself, both problems and opportunities since it is the time when many crucial physical and mental changes take place. For those reasons above, I strongly believe that adolescence period has the strongest influence on a human’s life./.

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