Please correct my essay. Thank you very much!!!!

[Edward_Rolandohmygod]

Topic:
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Since the beginning of time, children have received the education from both families and schools. There are those who claim that being good social person mainly depends on home condition, while others argue that it is the mission of teachers and schools. In this essay, I shall explore both perspectives of this controversial issue.

It is clear that school is undoubtedly important to us before stepping into the next part of our lives. First of all, teachers are the experts in teaching people because they all pass the courses in their universities and they know totally the way to instruct students. Moreover, what teachers teach at school are based on general programmes written and checked by Ministry of Education so they are absolutely ensured to be efficient. Secondly, communicating with classmates at school is really essential for students. The reason is that friends can easily interprete personality to each other when playing together. If children choose the right friends to go with, that will be great for them at the present and in the future as well

Some people also said that parents should outweigh teachers in instructing children how to be good members of society. Though it is true that learning in schools is more regular than doing at home, we should bear in mind that each people owns special characteristics which only their parents can understand. Therefore, general lessons at school are possibly not appropiate with certain students while parents can get their children a lot. Furthermore, parents have much more time with adolescents than teachers so children are influenced significantly by moms and dads, whereas the time students interact with their teachers is quite little.

To conclude, in my opinion, home education is more necessary with teenagers than school is. Parents not only understand whole personality of their children but also have a lot of time with them. If adolescents get enough care from parents, they will definitely be, at least, good people in the future.[/i]

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[Edward_Rolandohmygod]

Can anyone help me, please?Thank you!

[Ngoc Bich]

your essay is very very good !!! :))

[Katty2010]

Since the beginning of time, children have received theIR education from both families and schools. There are those who claim that being A good social person mainly depends on home condition, while others argue that it is the mission of teachers and schools. In this essay, I shall explore both perspectives of this controversial issue.

It is clear that school is undoubtedly important to us before stepping into the next part of our lives. First of all, teachers are the experts in teaching people because they all pass the courses in their universities and they know EXACT the way to instruct students. Moreover, what teachers teach at school IS based on general programmes written and checked by Ministry of Education so they are absolutely ensured to be efficient. Secondly, communicating with classmates at school is really essential for students. The reason is that friends can easily interprete personality oF each other when playing together. If children choose the right friends to go with, that will be great for them at the present and in the future as well

Some people also said that parents should outweigh teachers in instructing children how to be good members of society. Though it is true that learning in schools is more regular than doing at home, we should bear in mind that each peRSON/INDIVIDUAL owns special characteristics which only HIS/HER parents can understand. Therefore, general lessons at school are possibly not appropiate with certain students while parents can PASS ATTICATES ON TO their children a lot EASILY. Furthermore, parents have much more time TO SPEND WITH THEIR CHILDREN than teachers so children are influenced significantly by moms and dads. , whereas the time students interact with their teachers is quite little.

To conclude, in my opinion, home education is more necessary with teenagers than school is. Parents not only understand whole personality of their children but also have a lot of time TO SPEND with them. If adolescents get enough care from parents, they will definitely be, at least, good people in the future.

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Good Essay! Got to work on reading and sentence structure. Goodluck!
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[Edward_Rolandohmygod]

Thank you very much, Katty!