 #3 (permalink) Thu Nov 10, 2011 4:06 am Re: Please check my essay.Thank you! |
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| Edward_Rolandohmygod wrote: |
The improvement of technology nowadays, especially the Internet, have HAS changed the communicating way OF COMMUNICATION between people and people remarkably. That leads to relationships in society being influenced strongly in several things such as method and speed of interaction. However, this development can cause some serious problems.
There is no doubt that the Internet today makes everything include social connection be more convenient in comparison with the past, INCLUDING SOCIAL CONNECTION. First of all, we do not have to write a substantial number of words on papers anymore. Instead of that, all of our work is pressing the buttons on the computer keyboard. so that IT saves out OUR time and energy. Moreover, about 20 years ago, people spent much time running to the post office and buying stamps, whereas technology users nowadays do not have to go anywhere to send letters because of E-mail. Secondly, when sending your mails through the post office like in the past, the arrival time to the receiver is at least 3 days while it takes one second to transfer people’s word with the help from technology. That is why very few citizens today choose the traditional way.
Though it is true that technology supports our relationships a lot, we should bear in mind that the modern equipment takeS many things out of us. Communicating skill is one of those EXAMPLE because the Internet reduces the amount of face-to-face conversations and people do not have many chances to talk directly to each other. As a result, people will lose the ability to interact socially. Furthermore, when making friends on the Internet, it will create the opportunity for some bad users to lie about their lives or fake nicknameS and we cannot verify the speech of strangers. Consequently, people will easily face some unpredictable dangers in lives.
To conclude, in my opinion, the improvement of technology is one of the important parts in our lives and in social communication as well. Nevertheless, the Internet may bring us some negative effects that we are not able to foresee. Therefore, we should not depend on it excessively.
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Hi Edward,
I provide my opinions for your reference. In addition, the sentence "That leads to ..." in the 1st paragraph looks odd to me. But I'm not sure how native speakers feel. |
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